This one-shot is killing me and I need more poison, please! Beautifully written, very well told and true to character.

Oh my gosh that was good I can definitely see this progressing bit by bit you write so well great job, I feel out of breath, great job XD

an enormous smile at the end

Oh my gosh, That was wonderful. THAT.

Wow. I actually loved this. It was short, sweet, yet had lots of meaning. :D Well done!

the cake is a lie!

but honestly, that situation is so like them. every bit of OOCness is, too.

Can I thank your coworker, for making you write it, instead? However, I believe I want more too. XD

i think there were a few typos, but it was a really well-written fic! :) i think you got them really well in character! and the story summary was interesting and attention-grabbing. awesome work!

LOL, not the kind of love most people see nowadays, but much more subtle, the kind of romance one would expect from such a dark background! Charming, and awesome.

I can't think of a better way to summarize how I feel about this then 'Oh my~'. It was delightful, it was sexy, and it worked. You made the whole kiss fairly believable as a battle rather then feelings, but the remote hint of romance -or lust if you prefer- topped it off well, especially to this Heine/Naoto fan. However the best part was the ending, brilliant and leaving this reader wanting more.

I hope see more in the future!

This is simply deliciously evil. That last line was priceless.

lololololololol XD

I love it!

That...was...great! I'm such an idiot for always getting so hyper whenever I read something this well! It was like they were actually fighting... and not at the same time. I can go on and on...and more so... I liked it a lot!

I want more too D;

While it is a bit odd that Haine would ever do such a thing - you somehow still made it .work.

And that's what matters.

You managed to give us enough insight into their thoughts...or at least Haine's thoughts - and the subtle, yet important, descriptions about their actions are what makes this whole scenario so convincing. It's not about lust -maybe bloodlust- it's always about war with these two - and you somehow turned something that's usually shared between two lovers into a freakin' battle. Brilliant.

You kept these guys in character and twisted this usually unlikely situation into your favor - what more can us readers ask for, except more lurrrve? [;

i can totally see them doing that lol