Many years too late, but holy hell the spelling in this...

and we never found out what happened the end

kinda sad to see daphne portrayed that way she is one of my favorite girls for harry

I recommend rereading your story before posting to fix the little mistakes but like I said in the last chapter the content is great.

missing words and the wrong form of words other than that the actual content of the story is great id get a beta reader.

I do hope you make the next part of this story it is rather good.

I don't know if you'll bother reading this review, or if you still have any intention of writing a sequel, but this story has both some strong points & some glaring flaws.

On the strong side, I really like how you've done the romance with Parvati. The sex scenes are well done too. Focusing more on that relationship for the sequel would be a good idea. Especially having her along as they hunt the horcruxes down. Just don't feel too tied to canon, as that can be boring. Having another person along should give them a different perspective and more ideas.

On the other side, there is way too much quidditch in this story. For one thing, they don't play nearly that many matches. For another, swapping positions around feels like you just couldn't come up with any other ideas for drama, and it doesn't work.

Having Parvati join the team felt forced, but I think it worked alright over all.

Good Draco that Harry teams up with was really lame, and evil Ginny because she's jealous was weak too. Lavender, on the other hand, was really well done.

I would like to see a sequel if you ever decide to write one.

Why was Luna in one of Harry's classes? She's in Ginny's year- the one right behind his.

Still a couple weird spots, and word mixups. But still far fewer than before.

"Snapping even at Lavender who merrily wanted to ask her opinion on what perfume she should put on today." Merrily should be merely, I think. Merrily like.. sort of makes sense, but not really.

Still an excellent read, though.

Wow, this chapter was a massive improvement.

I didn't notice any word mixups, you fixed that weird quotation mark problem, I didn't notice any dropped words.

Absolutely fantastic! Thank you very much.

It's *orgasm* not organism.

It's frustrating, because this fic is perfectly good. It's not the best writing by any means, but it's good enough to be enjoyably fluffy. It's just in desperate need of grammar and spelling correction.

This is quite poorly written. The quality would improve massively if you proofread your chapters, or got a beta. Or both.

You mix up words pretty often (loud/load is an example I remember off the top of my head), you mix up your/you're, you have the oddest habit of putting a space after your first quotation mark (every. single. time.), you occasionally drop words. Like mid sentence you just drop 'a' or 'an'. None of this makes it impossible to read, it just makes it more jarring and much less pleasant.

LMAO Ginny a death eater? This is just plain terrible. Trash story.

A great story here. I'll watch for a sequel!

Wow i really enjoyed this
Grammar didn't bother me much at all
Nice solid story