Reading this through until now, I'd have to say that your English is really good. You have a few little mistakes here and there but other than that, you did amazing. English is a really hard language to learn. Great job.

Wow. Don't you think Sasuke and Naruto were a bit young? I'm sorry, I can't keep reading this until you edit this fic. Good luck!

I like this so far but you really need a beta. Your tenses, and how you write your words, sentences, and paragraphs need some work. For example you wrote "None emotion in it anymore" which I think you meant was "There were no emotions in them" or something along those lines. I'm not the greatest when it comes to grammar either so I always need help. Most of your sentences are like that. It makes me cringe reading this. Your story has potential and if you get a beta it will show in your story. You really need one. I'm not trying to hurt your feelings. I just want your story to be the best that it can be.

Your writing is like a Lego movie

Still reading but just let me say one the... BOY LET ME LOVE YOU

Well ah, good job anyways c:

AWWW ANYWAY GOOD STORY

I LOVE IT KEEP GOING! ;)

great chapter!

Thanks for updating. I was re-reading my last comment. Auto-correct sucks. It keeps changing my words.

Anyway, I enjoyed this chapter as well. I'm glad Kisame is back.

I'm happy that your continuing this story. I enjoyed this chapters very much.

I have to read this over. Only remember vague details.

This was great just might want to edit some of your words for example quite a few time you put death instead of dead.

I like the idea of a sad ending than a sequel

It was great! But I would've put that Naruto came back injured like he got stabbed or something.
Still love it.

PLEASE UPDATE.