I read this long ago and didn't review. I love it! It's one of my favorites!

That was beautiful. You managed to write this without being overly graphic and almost like porn which I love.

Oh my. This was beautiful. You're an amazing writer.

That was beautiful. I enjoyed this story emmesly(sorry if I spelled that wrong im only 13).

This is really good!

The only thing Im gunna have to be picky about is the rating. it should be T, im not M. I wouldnt really want an 8 year old reading this haha:)

Aww... That was great! :D

ASDJKL; this was absolutely beautiful. If they were ever to have sex, I'd imagine it as something sweet and touching because of how much they care for each other. great job xD

"It was like a scene from a classic movie. The small confinement of the room was darkened to black and white, the only light reaching in through the window from the outside moon. It took a moment for my eyes to adjust but as if they were reading my mind, I could finally see the outline of the beautiful figure laying right beside me. She was smiling up at me. My favorite smile in the entire world, as I held her body close to mine."

- I love how you created a simple but romantic atmosphere for the setting of your story. A lot of people try to make the settings so perfect that they miss the point of true perfection in these situations. In this partucular insident, Eli thought that the perfection was who he shared the moment with and not how. He only cared for her and not the night in question.

"Every vein in my body screamed for more and more of her. A song was playing in my mind and our bodies moved to the rhythm of it. I had never heard it before, but it was our song. The only thing that sent me off more than before was the soft moans escaping her mouth, filling the dim room with more beauty than it could hold."

- This was a section of your story that really drew my attention. The song, as unknown as it may be, is left for you to wonder. To wonder how such a song can be invented in such an instant time. For me it showed that Eli truly loves Clare and subcontiously gathered every memory, every happening with her and created such song with the humming of the thoughts.

"Back into the arms of my world. My beautiful world. I laid beside, watching as her chest would rise, and then fall. And her eyes were closed yet her hand perfectly found mind, and I laid there, staring at the stars that had filled the night sky just outside the window and I thought about how none of them, however many there were could take place of the beauty that had just occurred."

- This was another selection from your story that I had to re-read just by your amazing writing. You have reay talent that should be shown to the world. If you ever descide to write a full novel I would be one who buys it. You have a great sense in putting your words down and creating such amazing art.

Thank you dear for this beautiful story. :) This is perfection.

beautiful lovely. 3

it was breath taking.

I'm glad you wrote this. I think that if these two do have sex it will be something like this.

Your descriptions were really nice!

Damn, how could someone write a story about Clare losing her virginity so AMAAZINGG?

LOOOVE 3