Reviews for APH RoChu: A Day Without China |
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Guest chapter 1 . 7/3/2014 It's pronounced wow I nee...(wo ai ni) |
Lost Friend chapter 2 . 10/17/2011 Ah Ivan don't cry, its going to be okay. (I hope) |
buguize chapter 1 . 7/11/2011 Poor Ivan ,Yao will come back to your side. |
Oki-aru chapter 2 . 3/26/2011 this is cute! |
whoevenISthis chapter 2 . 3/13/2011 D'awww so sad. I liked it. |
Waruitenshi chapter 2 . 2/26/2011 ... Wait... WHAT SNAPPED? Lmfao ohh come on! Please update! I must know! I have many speculations but no answers! Niyaaaaaah! I feel bad for Russia. I've got his attitude when it comes to being all possessive over someone yah love XD. I FEEL FOR YOU RUSSIA! HANG IN THERE! |
rhieny chapter 2 . 2/12/2011 update soon _ |
haraguro-tan chapter 2 . 1/22/2011 Aww poor Ivan ;_; Their separation during that period is always very sad. It's really nice of Ukraine to comfort him. Next chapter da? Just some constructive crit. I feel that there's an excessive use of italics in both chapters. I think italics are only relevant for inner thoughts. For flashbacks, it's best to state somewhere that it's a flashback or the most common method is to use the asterisk separator ( doesn't allow multiple asterisks in a line so I use a line separator instead). Otherwise, it gets confusing. Also, some layout issues. I'd put a space between each separate line. If you want the lines to be in the same paragraph, then there should be no line breaks at all. If you ever want a beta reader, I'll be glad to help when I have time. Just drop me a message! :D |
haraguro-tan chapter 1 . 1/22/2011 Yao with cat ears is always so adorable XD I love how they're arguing about how to describe Yao at the end XD |
Guest chapter 1 . 1/13/2011 Our Yao(I’m Chinese aru) is always cute. Just wear the cat ears Yao-chan, and Kiku I know you like Nii with cat ears, moe! |