You made that a little obvious.

Awesome; all twelve chapters were amazing. But I'm not quite sure who Autumn chose to be with; is it her dad? I'm pretty sure;but i just thought i might ask you. Also, if you could get permission, this should be published. This is awesome!

I read the description and wanna know the first thing that came too mind? I thought to myself, "I know who my dad is." Which you may think is weird until I inform you that my name is Autumn. When Ziva suggested a DNA test, I was like don't worry guys, I've got it all figured out.

Hahah I was right it was exactly who i thought

My brain is wrecking to find out which person is the dad is but I have a theory

"I don't know what to do." Gibbs, by now pretty sure what, or rather who, 'A' and 'B' were, gave her the best advice he could offer. "You've got to follow your gut." "My gut?" "Some people call it their heart, some people call it their soul, and some people call it their brain. Call it whatever you want, but it will always tell you the right thing to do." Gibbs said, somewhat philosophically. Autumn nodded, hesitated for a moment, and then threw her arms around Gibbs. "Thank you." She whispered before letting go and walking back down the hall. Gibbs stayed where he was, enjoying that just-hugged-by-a-little-girl feeling which he hadn't felt since before he had shipped out to fight in Desert Storm." - AW!

"There were a few grunts and a muffled groan before Ziva and McGee walked out of the other shed, a small bruise already forming above McGee's left eye. "It is clear now." Ziva said. "Three men. They had no proper training." Tony smirked, and even Gibbs allowed himself a small half smile." - Yay!

"McGee sighed and pulled out his cell phone to call his sister. "What's going on, McDaddy? Calling up a babysitter?" Tony asked as he looked up from his computer. "Shut it, DiNozzo." Gibbs said, walking into the bullpen and giving Tony a solid smack on the back of his head. "Shutting, boss." Tony said, rubbing the back of his head and glaring at McGee, who was leaving to go someplace else to call Sarah." - Hehehe.

"And her mother was Madison Keller! McGee vaguely remembered her. A good bit shorter then him, long brown hair, green eyes, and a welcoming, friendly smile. They had met in a bookstore, McGee remembered. She had asked him for help in reaching a book on a high shelf she couldn't reach." - Given that Tim is 6 feet, one and a half inches tall, pretty much most women in the world would ask his help for a book on a high shelf. I KNOW I would, and I am 5 feet, 6 inches tall.

"When she had finished, Abby stood silently for a moment, looking sadly at the girl drawing something. After a few moments, Abby shook herself out of her train of thought." - I bet Autumn reminded Abby of someone too, like she did Gibbs.

"I hope you get here before Gibbs starts ordering beheadings, McTardy." Tony mumbled as he slipped his phone into his pocket. Of course, Gibbs overheard and gave Tony a headslap. "Ow! Oh, sorry boss!" he said," - Any time that DiNozzo is head slapped, I am very happy.

"Autumn was lying down in Abby's gun room, wearing a baggy N.C.I.S tee shirt that Abby had found for her because her shirt had blood on it. She actually was tired, just as she had told Abby, but she wanted information more them she wanted sleep, and adults were usually more open with information if they thought that any kids around were asleep." - Astute of you, Autumn; some might even call it devious.

"I defiantly DON'T have kid," - "definitely DON'T".

"If I had a first name, maybe, but otherwise…" McGee stammered out through his shock. "Madison." Everyone turned to see Autumn standing in the doorway to Abby's office area. "My mom's name is Madison Keller." "How long have you been standing there?" Tony asked as McGee racked his brains. "Some investigator you are, if a nine-and-a-half-year-old can sneak up on you." Autumn said, one eyebrow raised. "I happen to be senior field agent." Tony shot back. Autumn did a classic McGee move; she rolled her eyes and shook her head in annoyance. Abby and Ziva put their hands to their mouths to muffle their laughter. "Apparently, not a very good one." Autumn said." - Those paragraphs were SO funny.

"yep, those two are defiantly related." - "definitely related".

BTW, "defiantly" means "in a disobedient manner"; "defy" means "to disobey"; and "defiance" means "disobedience".

"She had long blondish brown hair that fell to the bottom of her shoulder blades and green eyes that were watery with unshed tears. She looked familiar to Gibbs, but he was certain that he had never seen the girl before in his life. Something about the tilt of her head, the shape of her jaw, the worried look in her eyes all screamed you must know who I am! "Please, sir! I have to go inside! My mom's been hurt by bad people and she told me to come to the building with N.C.I.S on it because my dad works here!" Finally, the tears spilled over. Sobbing, the girl buried her head in her hands. The sight tore at Gibbs's heart. She could have been Kelly, crying because of something at school or because she fell off her bike. He knelt down next to her. "What's your name, sweetie?" he asked softly, gently. "Au-Autumn Keller." She choked out through her tears. "Well, Autumn, you can come with me." Gibbs stood up and looked at the guards. "I'll take her in." they nodded and let him pass with Autumn clutching his hand for dear life." - I might feel that director Shepherd was a nasty piece of work in the end, but she did spot (or re-affirm) how very good Gibbs is with kids.

Hi DarthAbby,

I have to say that I am by no means an expert when it comes to NCIS fanfiction – yours is the first I ever read – but I think I can already tell that yours is quite extraordinary. I really like the idea that you chose McGee as the father instead of the usual suspect (it sounds like there are a lot of stories out there where just that happens). Your characterizations were also spot on – I can imagine them behaving exactly like that.

The idea for the story was also very good, although I have to say that it would be great if the actual motive of the kidnappers could be explored somewhere. Oh, and I know it can be annoying when people point out little details, but you always use “defiantly” instead of “definitely”. I know it’s just a tiny detail, but I have to say that it does matter because it breaks the atmosphere and the suspense. Sorry, I don’t want to be rude or anything, it would just be really sad if that great story were disrupted by such a tiny mistake. Otherwise, this story is really good. It’s long, and I like long stories. I especially like your choice of words and your writing style – like saying that Autumn had never seen a person wearing a spiky dog collar when she met Abby.

And did Abby really develop a new phobia because of a nightmare? If that isn’t from the series, though: Congratulation on that idea! It’s absolutely fabulous.

Altogether, an enjoyable read! Thanks for the great story.

Very interesting story although I don't really understand how and why Madison blames Tim for the kidnapping it seemed like the men wanted something from her and then turned on McGee and his sister because they had Autumn not the other way around.

Okay, got this far and needed to point two things out to you...

First:

"Only ten days since she was *released from the hospital* and had started staying at Gibbs's house..."

You say that but then the rest of the chapter takes place in the hospital, her hospital room. I checked the other reviews and I seem to be the only person who has noticed this. It's a rather big continuity error there.

Second:

You seem to be confusing "defiantly" with "definitely". As in "Yep, she is definitely his daughter" ...not "defiantly his daughter."

Other than that this story is very interesting as I've never read/seen a story about McGee finding out that he's a dad. It's always Tony in this scenario.

I love it. But, did autumn choose Madison or mcgee? From what I can tell she chose Madison but I just want to make sure.