Please update

Hope to read more soon

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Overall, this would have been one of the greatest DA fics around had it been completed. Most people have a tendency to end up at one of two poles when it comes to crossovers; the main character either loses all former abilities and must relearn using the new world, or, the main character is overly powerful and trounces everyone. A lot of stories are somewhere in between, but those are rare. The sad thing is that it’s these stories the end up having the least commitment because readers have poor taste. They prefer the powerless hero (who might’ve gone through hell to get where they were) or the overpowered God. That or it’s merely admit harem fic. Oh well, I guess that’s the sad truth. At least you didn’t do the stupid gender flip for Harry. Honestly, use a female from within canon; don’t change genders to suite your needs. It makes it obvious I at how bad you are at writing from that genders perspective.

Why is it that all the good fanfiction is dead? Crappy harem fics and bash fics keep multiplying, but ACTUAL stories send up dead. Seven Years R.I.P.

My only real question is this on hold?

Hope you continue this is amazing!~~~~

Moreeeeee PLEASE PLEASE PLEASEEEEEEE

MOREEEEEEEE PLEASE PRETTY PLEASE!

I really really love this story *-* I've read this so many times :D I hope you'll continue this story someday :)

Very amazing story. At first I wasn't too sure about Harry having this child like side to him and clinging to Malcolm but after reading at all the way through I think I understand why. He has had to do so much on his own with the weight of the world on his shoulders that having Malcolm to be there and taking the reponsibility for once and protecting him probably feels really good. I think showing both Harry's child like side and fiery side together is genius it really adds so much more to his character. Please please consider continuing this story its amazing and u have a lot of talent!

Its interesting, though I'd find it a lot more interesting if it wasn't slash - thats just me though. I don't particularly care for your description of harry as a small girly boy. If this is at the end of Deathly Hallows when he gets moved over then he should be fully grown(even for harry) and for whatever reason Im reading him being portrayed as exquisitely small and supremely effeminate. I find your portrayal of Calin disturbing as a leering king ready to take advantage of his status and very happy to force himself on anyone that he can get away with. I also can't find resonance between two faces you're giving harry, the small child clinging to malcom and forever in his arms and the powerful mage that could destroy ostagar in hours. You keep switching between a submissive and scared child-like harry and a powerful man. Unless you figure that into your story (mental disorder or PTSD) it'll just eject people from the story because the character is so different.

wonder wat he's gonna say about the Joining.

Please continue writing this. It's very good and I want to read more of it.

Please please please write more. This story is soooo good! I love how you got all the characters so far and it's just ah! I love it! So please continue with this incredible work of art!

Love this story so much. I really like the pairing of Malcolm and Harry. :D Hope you pick it back up and continue it sometime!