Beautiful story! Loved the good ending. I would love it if you made a second story about the journey home or somewhat. But that is something for you to decide of course️

You are good at portraying Lucy's faith, and the affection between the siblings. I was touched by Lucy's and Ed's sacrifice for the crew. At the same time, while yes, it was the loving thing to do for him to stand by her, and for them to try to save their subjects... I can't help but wonder whether it was entirely responsible for Ed to, essentially, rob Narnia of half its administrative machinery at a single blow. If things had turned out differently, would it have been better for his country as a whole if he'd left with his men, thus keeping at least three thrones filled? But would he have been Edmund if he had?

Oh my goodness! You have to make a sequel! It would be awesome to know Susan and Peter's reactions for when the crew come back without Lucy and Edmund!

Great story!

Nice story! I really liked it, and I'm glad the ending was a happy one. The fact that Edmund stayed with Lucy to the very end... that was so awesome! I mean, he really does love his little sister! Great work, and keep writing! You're pretty good at it!

interesting XD

This is one of the better fics I've seen in a while. You did a get job! Hope to see another one from you! :)

Post more soon, wanna read what happens next!

Wow! Please update soon! I would love to see if they actully made it or not. But just one little tip. Since Aslan is Jesus when you talk about Him in any form. May it be Lion, He, or Him. Captialize it. Other than that I didn't see anything wrong. This story is amazing!

Ohmygoodness. It was so perfectly written. how will you go on from here? Updte soon. Xx

NO! Why did you have to end it there! Did seeing the Lion mean they were dying and were about go so see Him, or that He was coming to save them? Surely they can't die, right? Is it possible? Oh, please don't kill them! And if you do, just end it there, and don't write what it will be like for Peter and Susan, cause that will be too painful to read their heartache.

Anyways, get the next chapter out soon, I'm dying to see what happens! And good job!

Hope you all enjoy this next chapter! This is not the end, I still have one or two more chapters, next up is Cair Paravel's reaction.

Loved it post more soon.

Very beautiful. Xx

I just found your story and I must say that I love it. Can't wait to see if lu and ed survive!