more please

loved it rather hot

wow that was very good! Kinky too! I loved it. :)

awesome!

i love it!

Whew! Hot and very nicely done.

I liked it...ohh and fyi this was a Severus n Hermione story right?...cuz im pretty sure u put Lucius' name somewhere in there instead of Severus'.

Um... The story in general is okay but there's just a couple issues that jump out at me: a.)Lucius randomly pops up and subsequently disappears in one of the sentences in the middle which, in itself, is frankly a sentence fragment and b.) I'd advise against using "whilst" purely because, though it's technically the same as "while" it's not as often used in contemporary English and therefore disturbs the flow of words. However, because, upon further reading, I found that "while" doesn't quite fit either, I'd suggest replacing "whilst" with "as."

Where does Lucius come in? I was slightly confused by that.