This is so good!

You know that you're getting the godly parents and several backstories totally wrong, right?

Reyna's actually a daughter of Bellona, Roman goddess of war, or something. (read MOA)

excellent

Haha! Lupa got licked by Mrs. O'Leary!

This... was amazing, as if it was an alternate version written by RR himself.

I MUST read the sequel. I enjoyed this just as much as the originals, if not more. Fantastic job.

Well, I must say, you are one fantastic fanfiction writer. It's extremely hard finding the few percentage of people who are actually great fanfiction writers, but I've finally spotted another one!

Now that I've read Son of Neptune, it's an interesting contrast. I'm not sure yet, but so far I'm beginning to like your fanfiction more than the actual book. Your way of proceeding with Percy's "memory loss" is actually more logical and more enjoyable to me. It's not a repeat of Jason and how he lost his memory. But, it seems that your story moves a bit too fast. Most fanfictions are like that, but yours is one of the ones who has a good amount of control. I like it because you don't throw reasons up in the air and give questions/plot-holes convenient and ridiculous answers. The characters aren't Mary-Sues(there are hints of it, but then again, a lot of characters from this world will have to have a hint of perfection. That's just the way it works.)

Hopefully that was constructive :) As I'd like to repeat, I'm enjoying this story and looking forward to reading your other stories!

Reyna looked up at Dakota, "You know you're probably going to have to carry me out of here, right?"

Dakota nodded, "Just do what you have to do."

youre like the only person in that can pull off the boy-carry-girl-in-arms-thing :D :D :D

OMG this is like so awesome! dakotaxreyna 4eva

Hm.

Good ending chapter.

I am now going to see how this carries on into the second one.

-Jill J.

Hey Ro.

Since this is the first of the series you linked me, I thought I'd start here.

I liked this. It was good.

The twist of altering instead of erasing Percy's memory was a good one. -Very- original.

Overall, good work.

-Jill J.

Great story

I dont like the son of neptune storoes out there actually cause i think the romans are really boring n i could nvr memorizethir is dfnitely an son of neptune fic.

I see the "little" twist you were referring to. He has no memory of being a demigod! please excuse my stating the obvious

This is great!

Keep writing!

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