I had to write this review again because apparently you deleted my other reviews. You know, it's very rude and childlish to delete comments that are not just meaningless praises like: "I luv ur story plz update soon!" Mind you I never even said that this is a bad story or anything like that. I LIKE your story! That's why I wrote those reviews. If your fans want to give you some feedback, it means that they CARE!

If the author can't handle criticism, they shouldn’t post the story publicly. Or at lest they should say so in their A/Ns.

And I'm sorry. I am not used to being so critical when it comes to stories I like and I know that a bunch of people are probably going to hate me for this. But I hope this helps because short comments like "Amazing chapter! Update soon" is not a real review and doesn't help the author to improve.

So; The story is good, unique and well-narrated. But the way dialogues and reactions were portrayed were a bit off! I remember this Sookie is 26 so she should be an adult, right? But the way he is treating her and the way she is acting in this chapter make her seem very childish and childlike. Since these stories build to a sexual/romantic relationship, this has taken on a (likely unintended) creepy tone.

"What kind of woman falls asleep in the middle of a Vampire bar, in the arms of a Vampire no less? She is trusting and naive…rare traits in humans today. Dangerous traits."

Seriously, what kind of adult falls asleep just like that in public in the presence of complete strangers who are vampires? When you read these lines, you could easily assume that Eric is not Sookie's lover, but a parent who has to take care of his child (there are numerous other similar lines in this story as well, but this is just one example).

If she is this childish, for him to have sex with her would be very much like pedophilia. An immature Sookie is the norm, but distracting her with shiny baubles as a bribe to behave is like a mother promising her kid a cookie if she will be good while being pushed through the grocery store while riding in the seat of the cart. In other words, this Sookie is coming across like a five year old. Certainly not mature enough for sex! Sorry but when the authors take this approach, they are letting the relationship between Eric and Sookie mimic the connection between a dysfunctional parent and a child. As loving their relationship might seem, it does not feel like a genuine connection between two equal adults.

Also the way how Eric developes feelings fir Sookie is just kind of fast-paced. And what's worse, he said, I love you without second thoughts. In my opinion, it needs some improvement. The ending is rushed too. You should take your time. It shouldn't matter how many chapters are there as long as it was organized and narrated in an orderly manner, with regards to the right reaction and consequences with each event and conversation.

Though the plot is good and the concepts are original, I really think your characterizations need some improvement. Practice Write, Practice, Write! That's all I can say.

Thank you for reading my review. I hope this helps! Good luck!

Loved reading this story

Nice very nice! Only wish I could have learned what the AP wanted with Sookie and Eric.

great story ...don't know if you still check this site...but i loved this story and am continuing to read all you other stories...great writer...thank you

Thank you! I really enjoyed Eric's POV (which suprised me :D). Usually he turns out to be too sappy for my taste, but yours was perfect!

What a wonderful story! Thank you so much for writing. It was an interesting take on my favorite couple from the series. Thank you!

Finally a fanfic author that does not write Sookie as a total narcissistic loon. If this Eric could learn to trust her too, then they will have a fighting chance in this fantastic fanfic world.

I cannot imagine smell sensitive vampires tolerating smoking in their presence.

Great idea for a chapter!

I admire the cleanliness of Eric and all vampires.
I also love that Eric sends up prayers to his gods.

LOVE THE SUPE BANK IDEA!

lemon tree it up

PLEEEASE DONT KILL CHRISTIAN!

I love the humor throughout this whole story! :

lol, lover and vampire assassin baking :0