Wow.. I think you did an great job with this! Keep up the awesome work!

I liked. It was very interesting and the idea of Lily thinking the same as Severus ["He still hasn't forgiven me"] is amazing. Never thought it could be that way :)

Great job~

-the thoughtless moments are when you see the real heart of a person-

Does that mean that the "real her" is someone who would smile at the sight of her best friend being hung upside down, covered in soap and vomit, slowly suffocating? Or someone who would call him "Snivellus" and leave him to the Marauders' tender cares, despite knowing what they would do to him, just because she was angry?

As always, one should be very careful when making "ad-hoc" arguments like that.

For the most part, I liked the way you presented the two points of view.

-She closes her ears to the things she doesn't want to hear, and she clings to that one thoughtless moment as her excuse.-

That was probably my favorite line.

Beautifully written. I don't believe a word of it, because I see a totally different Lily in canon than you obviously do, but it has a reality of its own that transcends canon.

And I didn't think it was possible I could love you more. Seriously this is incredible. Just everything about it, their personalities, and Snape's love for her, and just the pure hopelessness of their whole relationship.

It's just so amazing. And I don't think I can rant and rave any more about how much i love this... just know I plan to reread this a million times... and most definitely request more Snape/Lily from you because you write them so gosh darn gorgeously.

Anyway I will love you forever for this. Everything about this is just incredible. THank you sooo much!