Reviews for A Green Sun Illuminates the Void |
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RazRift chapter 24 . 3/7 Very well written. Loved the whole thing minus the inconclusive ending, but the brief ending is understandable. The way the world building made all of Halkeginia feel real was amazing and so was Louise's journey into high fantasy. All in all, Very Cool |
Flagarach chapter 22 . 3/18/2019 Thus far I've been enjoying the series. Your forte seems to be quite skilled in the inter-personal relationships. Thus far I've been enjoying it, and I think I will enjoy the second part of the series too. I've also noticed that your "Albonian" is just the Frisian language. Thus far it has been correct and clear, but there was one illogical choice this chapter. In the sentence "Folken! Wetter! Wetter!" (Which I'm going to assume means "Guys! Water! Water!") Folken translates to people as in a nation-wide level (e.g. Brits, Dutchmen). For small groups like here the correct Frisian would be Minsken. |
Guest chapter 24 . 10/19/2018 honestly, id give it a 3/10, io most of the time reading i was spent being annoyed by character flaws or "convenient" thigns happening. the only times i got atleast somewhat excited was when Louise was fighting. really, mostly it just felt like bad attempts at throwing random words around and seeing what happened. ah i just came up with a fitting word melodrama, no sense just random nonsense. |
Guest chapter 15 . 10/19/2018 .. i was reading this story because of Louise and now im bored out of my mind |
Guest chapter 11 . 10/18/2018 ridicolous, fencing is not real sword-fighting, it is actually spectacularly shit, real sword-fighting involves things like wrestling because rapiers dont cut through armor and thus using movement meant for duelling with a rapier is just insane, Wardes sucks at real melee combat, he should immediatly consider committing sui to the cide |
droffatsstafford chapter 24 . 7/14/2018 This story was quite interesting. ...I'd have more to say, but I took a break of several days for my university orientation, and I'm rather off-balance, now. So, this is Book I of the Verdigris and Flame Sequence, and I can't help but notice that Book II still doesn't exist, even after four years. ...Not really sure what to think. Normally, I'd think someone gave up, but, with you, I could see you holding off on actually posting it; working more on your other projects, and fiddling with the storyline and individual chapters of this story's sequel on the side. But, I mean, it's been four years, almost four-and-a-half, so. Yeah. Not really sure. But, hey! Maybe that's one of those other projects you put Overlady on hold for. (Or maybe that was mostly for that White Wolf/Worm crossover of yours. ...I'm not gonna dive into that, no thank you. I'll read a crossover despite not knowing shit about one half of it, but I'm not gonna do that when I know nothing about either series, no sir. Nope. Not gonna do it. ...Probably.) ...Well, I'll just follow my typical routine; don't think about it, and be pleasantly surprised by an update. Always works. -droffatsstafford |
droffatsstafford chapter 19 . 7/11/2018 ...Is it just me, or has the general narration relating to Louise become more... poetic? Like in the last chapter? ...I don't think it's just me. -droffatsstafford |
droffatsstafford chapter 18 . 7/11/2018 it's good -droffatsstafford |
droffatsstafford chapter 17 . 7/11/2018 Call me crazy, but I think something's rotten in the Republic of Albion. -droffatsstafford |
Masterx01 chapter 24 . 7/10/2018 Well, i just finished of reading this one. Not bad i would say. The grammar, storytelling, imagery and prose, were all superb, if only most of the authors were half as good giving details for imagery as this i would be a very happy reader. Althought i have against it that it somewhat lacked of... memorable(?) parts, everything is nice all, specially the parts showing her struggles and development, but it lacked of those epic moments that makes you remember it fondly. |
droffatsstafford chapter 16 . 7/10/2018 Ah, yes. With this, Louise has everything she needs to take over the world. -droffatsstafford |
droffatsstafford chapter 15 . 7/10/2018 NO ONE IS SAFE -droffatsstafford |
droffatsstafford chapter 14 . 7/10/2018 I've been forgetting to review these last few chapters! How shameful! ...Nothing useful to contribute, though. -droffatsstafford |
droffatsstafford chapter 11 . 7/10/2018 SHE GOT LAID ...by a man, which is the opposite of a woman, but still... SHE GOT LAID ...Ahem. Never a dull moment, in your stories. What is this "Rhyme" that Irukuwa (Irukuku? Irukukwa? idk) speaks of? I know that she's a Rhyme Dragon, but I have a feeling that this "Rhyme" is something rather... different. That is to say, something from Exalted. "blood and breaking" BROKEN HYMEN I love Freud -droffatsstafford |
droffatsstafford chapter 10 . 7/10/2018 Truly, Marisalon's cause is a noble one: Getting Louise laid by a woman. -droffatsstafford |