Great job

Omgs, nooooo. Naruto is so lit in this story!

I wonder what number I am? Anyway all I wanted to say was that I would like you to continue this story if only because there aren't enough good naruto/Haku fictions out there and this has the making of being a great one. I was really looking forward to the character dynamic that you created. I was initially surprised about the relationship Naruto had with the Third. However, I can't wait to see how Haku responds to knowing that for who knows how long the Third was the only person Naruto knew and that his precious person was like hers. I wonder what Naruto's philosophy is towards humanity after spending so much time alone?

a note in the summery or first chapter about this not being really complete would be better than at the end of the last chapter

This story wasn't bad at all until you got to the seal/ venom form from Spiderman thing going. It's OP, unworkable as far as plot goes and simply doesn't make sense. Good luck in future endeavors.

I like the originality of your story and I ask that you please continue.

ehh, i realize jiraiya is pretty stupid most of the time, but to create a seal that takes over its host's mind? and have the host actually keep on using it? i thought the whole point of having the sandaime train naruto was to eventually build up his skills to match those of hiruzen? essentially a second "god of shinobi". instead though, you have him acting like a dumbass. at the same time however, i can understand his stupidity and the drawbacks of the seal if you purposely placed those there to act as a plot point. Like say, making naruto go on a long journey in order to defeat a manifestation of the seal to gain control, or simply train with the seal constantly on to get used to its effects, or learning enough about seals to rip it off and make a replacement. heck, as you mentioned the kyuubi being a girl, i can even imagine the faulty seal being his ticket in with her. Perhaps by being so overtaken, the only way to bring him back is to mark naruto with a mate seal or something else that would force them to grow much closer. as it is though, i'll add this to your required 50 review while on hiatus, and hope to see that poll you mentioned soon.

Good job continue the story

wow.. this is shit. and your comments about mandatory reviews... are laughable. go suck a spike dick. :)

Gah! noooo..., T_T hiatus sucks. Meh... it's interesting but, try being more detailed when describing stuff... like the armor. Also, u have a stupidly long time-skip... 7 years... and right after a 3 year one. There are now 59 (58?) reviews... i believe only the poll is now needed.

First off, I understand that it is under hiatus.
Interesting story, reasonable well written grammatically and good characterisation of individuals, I did think that Haku's and Zabuza's seemed slightly OC from what I would expect for missing nin and for their particular situation but that is my expectation(not for their characters but as missing nin, they seem to be a bit too trusting, I understand the fights u have them do but they just seem to switch sides at the touch of a button, it didn't feel like there was solid reasoning to their actions). I do think that both the action scenes and change of scenes seemed slightly jerky and it didn't flow, as in it didn't feel smooth and sequential. In saying that, it was clear what was happening in the action scenes.
Lastly, towards the start of chapter four, you attempted to use the abc points to make it stand out, it works to a degree but there was some lacking in the clarity of the wordage and a degree of repetition (especially in the two sentances before this, u repeat the same thing twice), again, this is in my opinion.
Any way, it looks like a interesting story, hopefully you are able to get some motivation and create a story plan for this as it does kinda seem like you are chasing your muse about rather than writing to a planned and organised storyline.
All the best,
Named

I hope that you continue this story man it is interesting to say the least. As for how good it is i really can not say as the story really is not long enough yet. Also maybe you should had your muse for this story convert to Jashinism (hahaha lol-I really dislike hidan

This story was amazing. I would love to see the chakra armor develop over time.
Maybe this one shot could turn in to a spin off in which Naruto develops this ability as he goes through cannon.

Interesting story. I know you probably won't continue this story, but it was good as long as it lasted. Thanks for sharing and hope in the near future that you might continue this again.

Is Maelstrom taking Zabusa and Haku with him to Konoha?