Reviews for Lost Soul |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I hope you find your way back to this story. It is one I would love to see concluded. It has a fascinating storyline. They just need to find a way to get Edward’s souls into Anthony. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Been wating patiently a while now. Is this abandoned? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hope that you will continue with this story. (You have indicated that is your p!an.) The plot of your story is fascinating and unlike any other that I have seen. Can't wait to see where you go with it. |
![]() ![]() Grammar...OMG Bella went to counseling ON DOMISTIC VIOLENCE? ON? WTF? Surely you meant that she went to counseling FOR domestic violence...not ON. It just makes the characters sound like idiots! |
![]() ![]() So bella went to view the house and just as she told her real estate lady she would take it...her belongings pulled up in the drive way. That's interesting don't you think? You would think that you would have to fucking PAY FOR THE HOUSE before you could move your shit in! There is paper work ya know? Besides that serious mistake there is some grammar issues in this first chapter that need your attention. I really hope you didn't write a human alice with visions. That would really suck, I hate it when writers do that. Because Alice was crazy in her human life for a reason, human brains aren't meant to be capable of that sort of thing. But once she became a vampire...well I guess her brain was strong enough to handle it. I just don't think its any good in a human story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story and was wondering if you are going to finish it? |
![]() ![]() Yay! A new chapter! I am glad Bella told Jasper about the emotional abuse. Poor Edward wanting to be corporeal so he can hold Bella...I feel so sorry for them finding each other and still being so far away! I watched a movie once where the ghost was haunting a girl and actually had relations with her! Is Edward jealous of Anthony? I lnow Anthony looks like Edward but he thinks of Bella as a little sister..sorry it has taken me a while to read your new chapter but I haven't received any new alerts. As always I am your dedicated reader...twifam1 |
![]() ![]() ![]() PLEASE CONTINUE THIS STORY! It is so beautiful and amazing and I NEED more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I need to apologize to you. I am just reading this chapter. I loved it! I can't wait to see how Bella and Edward develop their relationship. I am hoping Bella will be able to see Edward at some point. Even if only in a dream. I am so glad you haven't given up on your story like so many others have. The story is great and when it's completed I'm going to read it all again from start to finish! ! We are looking forward to the next chapters that you have stated are exciting! ! I am still here stalking your story but I haven't been on the site as much lately because I haven't had time. But as always I remain your dedicated fan...don't give up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it so much! Please update soon |
![]() ![]() ![]() Brilliant chapter don't stay away so long this time. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it hope you update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Absolutely adored this chapter, great work as always. Please update soon? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow been a long time, poor bella, but I hope you update sooner again |
![]() ![]() ![]() I was so happy to see an update in my inbox, and you didn't disappoint! This was a great chapter! |