Oh I loved the last line where their loss is "halved" and their victory "doubled"! It ended a great freeverse! Brillant!

Oh my god I LOVE this! You're an awesome poet/writer! I really have many things to comment about this. But the last stanza is really my favourite. (Monster. Powerful. Predator. Master.) too. It's in "MPPM" pattern. Everything in the free verse is flawless, spectacular, impressive. :O There's not a single mistake in this BEAUTIFUL poetry. You use all the fonts with such skill that I am flabbergasted. Yet I still have so much to say about this amazing piece of art. This is going to be my favourite poem for my whole life! (Unless you write another even better one...)

Now it's one of my favourite stories! ;D {EPIC!}

Ah! I'm going through these so joyfully! Lovely, lovely - all so beautiful! And listening to Beethoven sonatas while I read about Lucius Malfoy - thank you for such an enjoyable evening spent with him. :)

Beautiful, beautiful poetry. I love to read it, and your is some of the best - you really have talent here, I would give anything to write peotry like you do.

This completely sums up everything I've every thought about Daphne/Lucius - though I'm not fond of it, this is exactly how I imagine a reltionship between the two of them would pan out.

Some of these lines are sheer perfection :

Three rounds.

Two players.

One goal.

(To win) - a perfect way to start, it catches your attention immediately - and:

With her, he is himself...

Now and then.

Because her clear blue eyes

Never saw what he was,

(Monster. Powerful. Predator. Master.) - completely Lucius, and gorgeously phrased as well, magically musical - in particular.

All-in-all, exactly what I look for in a freeverse - most definitely a favourite.

Oh, the beauty of poetry! And this one is particularly spectacular! Very well done!

Pri x

First, before anything else, I'd like to apologize for not getting this to you sooner. :( I owed you this review about three days ago, according to the laws of review tag. I'm really sorry. :(

Moving on! Now, as I'm pretty sure you know, I'm not a fan of freeverse. So, I've decided to only say what I liked in this. Ready? Ok!

1] "Three rounds. / Two players. / One goal. / (To win)"

I loved this line.I liked especially how you broke it up - it lead me icely into the rest of the verse. My only nitpick is that I think a period after (to win) would make it more final - and I think you need that - but otherwise, I really did enjoy this line.

2] "Because her clear blue eyes / Never saw what he was,"

At first I didn't notice this line, because the italics were distracting me, but then I re-read it and I really, really liked this. I'm not particularly a fan of cross-gen simply because I always wonder 'what were theythinking?' - and this explains it a lot. What I take from it is that she likes the attention - not in a bad way, but in a "I want to feel loved" way. Y'know? I also liked the underlined "Never" - it made it stand out a little more. I'm glad you did it, because if it had just been italicized, I would have ignored the fact that it's supposed to be important. [Which leads me to a question, why so much italics? But, whatever.]

3] I also really enjoyed he line "Her silver spoon gone" - that's a reference to what, exactly? A story or fable or saying or something, right? Well, anyway, it made me think that their was more behind it - that Daphne isn't a princess. I think it made her sound... almost *defiled*, without being quite so brutal about it. It's just really saying that Daphne has changed - has *been* changed - and that change isn't necessarily for the better.

Anyway, reviewing freeverses is always hard for me because I have so little to say. I'm going to end it here with a very, very sincire KEEP WRITING! You're great. :)

"Victor d.

(Theirs)"

Somehow those last few sentences grabbed me instantly. This was beautifully written. You do this pairing so much justice.

You have a wonderful talent for poetry. And I also love this particular song you used as an inspiration. Its one of my favourites.

I loved this! You handled the game theme beautifully... I especially loved the beginning and the end ("three rounds, two player, one goal" and the loss halved, but the victory doubled... it was really meaningful, it said it all about them, pretty much). I loved his "calling love a loss" too, and that line: "(Monster. Powerful. Predator. Master.)". The whole story flowed really well, and your writing was brilliant as always - very striking. Great job :D

Your Daphicus free-verse has actually reignited my interest in poetry. I particularly love the use you made of parentheses in this poem. Your rare-pair is definitely a new favorite of mine!

-jawdrop- Gorgeous, no, more than that. This, for me, defines perfection. This is everything I imagine that Daphne/Lucius is and the most it can be. Your writing is so beautifully styles, elegant and far from over the top. All of the italics etc make sense and don't detract from the beauty of the actual poem.

{{With him, she cannot tell

If she is winning or losing

The(ir) game of

Longing glances &

touches.

One kiss, and she forgets

(Death, screams, pain, war...)

To keep score,}}

My FAVOURITE part, it was so beautiful, it flowed perfectly and resounded in my mind. It made sense, the story worked. I wish I was as good at freeverse as you, I would kill to be that good.

So hauntingly beautiful. I would subscrive to author alerts, but it doesn't work for me D:

Still, fantastic, probably my fav freeverse ever.

:D

As always, happy to see more Daphcius from you!

This was soooo sweet! X3 The idea was great, the formatting was a hit, and the flow, the /beat/ really set everything. I was rooting for them the whole time! XD

It's very Lucius of him to see love as a loss, but I like how he changes-it's a development, a maturity (yes, even at his age!), and it doesn't seem OOC at all. :)

"She found it./Something from nothing,/"

I love that. Only Daphne could do that, and it's awesome that she rather turns the tables, no? B)

The last bit was my favorite. Complete and utter favorite. I don't think I can describe how much I love it. X3333

Fantastic work (as usual!), Clairebear.

-mew! B3