I feeeeeel so happy for starfire

I think you know that i know him as an slade you gave it away when you said apprentice

Your story is wonderful, continue.

Your story is wonderful, continue.

cool

next?where are next?

YO DUDE CUT US SOME SLACK & UPDATE!
GREAT,FANTASTIC,UNBELIEVABLE,AWESOME,EXCELLENT STORY KEEP GOING KIDDO LIVE YOUR DREAM( IF IT IT IS WRITING OR ETC...)
I READ ALL THE CHAPTERS BUT YOU LIED WHEN YOU SAID THAT YOU WOULD UPDATE [LIER LIER PANTS ON FIRE LOL]
ANYWAY PLEASE CONTINUE THIS EXTREMELY AWESOME STORY YOU LEFT ME WITHOUT WORDS I CAN IMAGINE IT IN MY HEAD SUCH DETAIL & GREAT QUALITY YOU SHOULD OWN DC COMICS OR HELP WITH IT [ I WOULD HELP BUT… I DONT EVEN HAVE A JOB AND I HAVE DEBTS 2 PAY IM SERIOUSLY BROKE BUT GO LIVE YOUR DREAM & PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE
UPDATE.
YOU HAVE A RARE TALENT THAT YOU HAVE 2 SHARE DUDE SO UPDATE OR WAR LOL
( ILL BE SAD IF YOU DONT UPDATE *SOB SOB SOB SOB* YOU LEFT ME WITHOUT WORDS THAT I CNT TALK ANYMORE[ LOL ]

WILL ALWAYS SUPPORT YOU
CANT SAY NAME IM JUST ANONYMOUS GIRL 2 EVERYBODY OR "IM KISS MY SS PEOPLE" BYE-BYE DUDE
P.S: *100 AS IN BETTER THAN 5 STARS BYE-BYE

Amazing chapter!

short sweet and to the point! hahahaha keep on writing! XD

Not bad for a third chapter...

Although, there are still a few things I'd like you to adjust...

1. Stop putting it in center... it ain't necessary...

2. Add more "drama" into play...

Like "Let me go! I want to get out!" Starfire screamed.

Geez, Alexis... -_-'

At least give it a little more splatter of character actions in the process...

Like this:

"Let me go! I want to get out!" Starfire screamed, banging onto the prison bars with her hands. Irritated, she tried blasting it with her powers, but to no avail...

That works too, and it'll really bring more readers to your story...

Regardless, it was a good story so far... keep it up and never stop! XD

"Living it my way..."

~Periosha

I love it wat was the deal aand will star get free?

I like the idea of this story, but the fact that it's centered makes it really hard to read to the point of hardly being worth it.

Hey Alexis! XDD

Found your story at last! Kala ko nag talkis... XDDD

Anywho, I've read the first two chaps; GREAT START! But there are a few things I'd like to have you iron out...

1. Your story has the length, but, it's not really interesting to me... or perhaps a lot of readers... apply more details into it, mix it up and add a little more drama/action/suspense, etc.

2. It was more on one liner dialog than anything, really. It looked like a script-like story. Try adding more actions to the characters, to give the readers more details to imagine how your characters react...

For Example:

I couldn't hold back my tears. "I was being bullied at school! I can't even tell this to father"

"Oh grandmother, please don't tell this to father!" I requested.

It's plain... A person would think: "So what?"

Fix it up, and you'll get more reviews and better stories... :)

"Living it my way..."

~Periosha

I like this plz update soon!

awesome so far hope u update soon