It was ok but you should at least let Germany use some lotion and prep Italy first! DX even if it was just a little bit of lotion it would have worked because if he really did go inside of Italy raw with no prep, BOOM! blood, tears, and screaming everywhere.

I was completely lost while reading this, half the time I didn't know what was happening. The grammar errors were numerous, and the fact that lube was not used really scared me. In real life, if you don't use lube, there is a risk of torn anal tissue. Italy was poorly characterized as "oblivious pasta-loving uke-chan", France was the obligatory pervert who gets into everyone's business, and Germany was the only sane one in the entire fic. Aside from his typed accent, he was my favorite character. Except he should have been sensible and gotten some form of lubrication.

Please do your research next time you try to write porn.
Mewsol

I literally started drooling while reading this. Good job!

Yet another poorly written pornographic fic. It's things like these that show me the corruption of these "writers" minds. If you want to make a good story - cut the porn. You're only making people orgasm instead of actually creating something tasteful.

Plot: 0

Execution: 0

Eye rape - Over 9000%.

Oh, it was so short, but it was hot. ;D

ZOMG LOVED IT! Read this during school, we much appreciate the France parts! WRITE ANOTHER CHAPTER!

spacingperfect

grammerperfect

plot lineperfect

how many stars?

5/5!

:D

Wow! Thats a hot fic with a demanding, wanton Italy;-)