Reviews for It's time to learn |
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![]() ![]() Espero o puedas tarducir al ingles, tienes talento pero neesitas mejorar tu prosa, la historia es interesante sigue publicando por favor |
![]() ![]() you are getting better WTG! |
![]() ![]() Hey this chapter was written a little better, good job! Really can be a good story all the way through, just need someone to help you out with it before you post it is all. |
![]() ![]() Man this could could be a great story, either you need some help or you are 10yrs old. Written like a 10yr old would write but why would a 10yr old be into discipline stories at this age. |
![]() ![]() Hmmm. |
![]() ![]() This writer is living in the past. |
![]() ![]() The Character of Harry Potter is an adult. Read Rowling. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You have a lot of errors in this. Did you accidentally take out a part of the story? You have Harry going to bed twice. Maybe you put up the wrong version of the chapter? Just checking. |
![]() ![]() lol..? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Why does harry always get spanked and always aloe of swats and snape never feels sorry for him |
![]() ![]() Hmmm. |
![]() ![]() Good story so far.I swear I'm gonna kill Snape for doing all this to Harry especially I'm gonna kill Dumbledore first. |
![]() ![]() Cool a new story I hope you stay with us Thank great story |
![]() ![]() Hey, calm down, don't you think that you are rushing in your story? You don't know how to use excalmatory marks. You use them too often an it looks like that they are always shouting. It's a bit toooooo OOC. Harry is acting extremely spoiled. Which he is not, by any means. Snape is acting like a fool and Harry too is acting like a stuck up 5year old. Dumbledore was acting like an idiot, quite OOC. The story is moving very fast and hitting a child with a belt is child abuse. I guess you should get a beta or story partner. Try Lucinda Hindle. She would be delighted to help you. |
![]() ![]() Why center it around abuse, and make it so much? The first couple of chapters were alright then it just started going off into a totally different direction altogether. You do realise that just because someone who is abused doesn't automatically do so on their children or others? Everyone has a choice to make or break that circle of repetitive behavior. |