Interesting story.

Can't wait to see more of it and I'm eager to find out what everyone's entrance fee was

looks like a great story so far, keep it up.

I was liking this story, and then this chapter came out, now I' on the fence about it. If you want to know why, here's a list.

1) Asuna and Konoka knowing that they can influence people in RG without being told

2) Konoka's wide array of pins. It was stated in TWEWY that Neku was the only player to be able to do that.

3) (From the last chapter) The entry fees. Its supposed to be what's most precious to you, but I can't see 3-A or Negi's memories of Asuna and Konoka being valid entry fees at this point in the Negima timeline.

Well, this looks like it's going to be quite interesting, especially since this is Negi where he isn't very powerful. Since this is after TWEWY, why is Rhyme there? It's been a few months since I finished the game, but didn't she pass away? Will Negi and Neku remember Joshua killing them? Did Neku keep his pin collection? Will other TWEWY characters be players, or will Joshua have killed off more Negima characters to fill out the cast?

As for critiques, most of your problems are those common to beginning authors (says the guy who doesn't write...). You have minor grammar errors, but nothing terrible. The story advanced a little fast for my taste. Also, there's no reason for the class to be stuck in Shibuya for 9 days. It'd be a lot cheaper for the Dean to just put them on a bus, maybe have them stay the night in a hotel while he organizes said bus.