PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE KEEP THIS STORY GOING!? It is getting MORE AND MORE incredible with every chapter AND it DESERVES to be finished! I am REALLY looking forward to reading this through to the end! Keep up the AWESOME work. :)

A good story, and it has a very good plot. If you make a continuation or continue
the same story will be very cool and that the continuation is very makes you a great fanfic writer, and please continue the story.

Please continue

eh its just like watchign a naruto and sasuke rivalry except that pedo snake is sasuke and juraiya is like naruto and naruto is watching it from a point of perspective

Nah naruto, you already have Jiraiya traits in you. you'll wake up next to a naked Tsunade when you are sixteen and will be married by there if you don't remember it

narutostill 17 walks up to him* yo sarutobi

hiruzenshocked* how are you still young

naruto: eh the author never let me aged

hiruzenanime tears* that figures

tsunadebefore time travel and married to naruto* he needs his punishment

also tsunadeafter naruto marries tsunade in time travel fic* give me punishment naruto-kun

No idea how authors can REPEATEDLY not distinguish the difference between you're and your. When I see low effort grammar like this and more, it genuinely pains me to read a story. This story pains me.

Why didn't naruto use the preta path during the spar? Some things in this story are just ridiculous! He can use all five elements right? He didn't even use the deva path! And jiraiya got the summoning contract! Just like that! That was utter stupidity! You cant just get a summoning scroll like that!

If Kushina also had the Rinnegan I don't think she would've died. I'm just gonna ignore that entire bit for my sake. Also, only 6 people have the Rinnegan within the last 200 years and 3 of them are from the most recent 2 generations?

Updated this story soon

Oook, you over did this chapter 1, Tobirama's thoughts and actions are completely exaggerated and very unlike a real, capable, cautious, and militaristic hokage that is Tobirama Senju.

I liked the chapter.

So in 1 week that he had to spend in the hospital Naruto didn't even try to enter his mindscape? And the first thing he thinks looking at Tsunade (the closest thing to a mother he's had all his life) is to date her... Forget smarter pervert Naruto, this one is simply Psycho

Erm, a six-year old declaring himself a super pervert?

Writing is good. But the story's not for me.