OMG... HNNGGGGG so cute3

great idea~ :D i love it

Gah, my brain. It died from hotness overload.

tHAT WAS,,,uHH, GREAT ;o)HoNk

omg YES! This was so cute and with the recent updates man, it just makes it all better. I'd love for you to maybe make a squeal, I'd like to see what moves Tarvos has to show "winks"

I think this just made me die.

This was so fucking funny at the beginning it killed me. Right dead.

You need to keep this shitup, you'reamazing. Haha

I loved this story sooo much! You captured both characters perfectly.

I love how perfectly you got Gamzee's voice, how incredibly random it is, how Tavros tumbled over many /interesting/ words, and just the end... Tavros was very in character as well, and the narration just had my smiling. And those were sweet rhymes. Real sweet rhymes.

Thiiiiis. Thiiiiis. Is a motherfucking miracle and shit. It would be even more motherfucking miraculous if you'd continueee. Pleeaase. Use my terrible impersonation as a sacrifice to your muse and then write more.

wOULD IT BE,,, uH,,, oKAY IF I WERE TO ASK FOR A CONTINUATION?

because seriously man, you captured their essences and made them drop strict beats. but the whole only one chapter, and the way it ended made it all a big tease. please deeply consider a followup.

Dammmnnnnn that was so funny and sexy all at the same time! You really captured the characters personalities beautifully and you have my applause.

tHiS wAs mOtHeRfUcKiNg bEaUtIfUl.

I found Gamzee a mite bit unnerving in this fic, in a good way, an excessively good way. There was a solidity to his character which didn't leave his normal dreamy self completely detached from Sobergamzee, I think the regular use of upper and lower case had a hand in this. He seemed genuinely compassionate, yet also /powerful/, which is not something I've come across before. The composition of characters made it excessively hot IMO, confident, like they have minds and hearts of their own, and pulls the reader along because they emote with the characters' instincts.

Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it."

["So what do you say we get some strict motherfuckin' beats all up in this bitch?"

To oblige his host, and because he simply couldn't resist some seriously stern beats, Tavros grinned back, "That is probably, exactly what we should do."]

Yeah pretty sure Tavros only hears about the idea from Rose, so he wouldn't be practicing it before sgrub ever happened.

Well, that was cute, and nice to see Tavros finally taking the initiative at the end.

ohhhh this is so cute. i don't really see them this close but how you write it is beautiful. anything to help tavros feel better is a-okay with me C: