| Reviews for Children Of The Future |
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   Lexie Starfire chapter 2 . 11/18/2015 This was really good i loved it |
| me chapter 2 . 11/9/2015 aaaaawwwwww! |
| narusaku143 chapter 2 . 2/15/2014 Thank u for ths awsme story. U cmplete my day, Please write a narusaku story bsed on mamga chapter 663 |
| heavansick chapter 1 . 4/15/2013 one of the best fanfiction i ever read! |
| Duesal Bladesinger chapter 2 . 3/18/2013 This was a nice story, but a bit confusing, especially when the adults came back in time as well. |
| The Keeper of Worlds chapter 2 . 3/17/2013 Well done:) |
| DeathCheater chapter 2 . 3/17/2013 Oh please update! Mark as fav! |
| shadow kitsune14 chapter 4 . 8/22/2012 it was good just was not that clear about stuff that was going on |
| a happy person chapter 4 . 7/12/2012 this is one of my favs |
| dark queen of awesomeness chapter 4 . 10/11/2011 i love this story! |
| J.Shoot.Me chapter 4 . 4/16/2011 There's a lot of grammatical and syntax errors, so you might want to spend some time reviewing and rewriting. If you do that you'll probably catch most of your spelling errors too. Stay away from time travel. That's my suggestion for most writers. It is way too complicated for a short fiction. The paradoxes this piece opens up are too numerous to count. Setting all that aside, I have to ask, if they can 'time travel,' why wouldn't they go back to points where they would want? ie, post Jiraiya's death and the destruction of the Leaf? Your whole point of the story seemed to be to show a love story. But it was glossed over in about 2 paragraphs. Speaking of which; that 'bedtime story,' should completely be rewritten as I could only make heads-or-tails of it because I'm familiar with the actually story. I appreciate the effort, but please take some time to clean it up and fill up those holes. Again, reconsider time travel as a venue for your stories. Good luck! ~JSM |
| Lucy Ash Hawthorne chapter 4 . 4/15/2011 love it! |
| 22288 chapter 4 . 4/15/2011 Got to say this is one of my Favorite Story's I have read in a while. I hope you keep it going I would love to read about how Naruto and Sakura get together and if Sasuke has problems trying to get the village to like him since he did betray them all. Loving the story hope to see it some more. |
| ero-sennin56 chapter 4 . 4/15/2011 LOVE IT BUT WHAT HAPPENEND AT THE END? |
| saveme57 chapter 4 . 4/15/2011 To short I was expecting the story to be longer thn 4chapters. It was good but it ended to soon |
