I really like this. Your expressions are elegant and the flow of your story is natural. You didn't even have to use dialogue. Well done Ballades :)

I like a lot when Mitsui starts wondering if he has ever looked as good as Sendoh That was just sweet. I wish your story were longer, I had a great time with this chapter.

Not my type of fic, but I'll have to say, this is well written. I wouldn't have thought it possible to portray Mitsui as insecure about his appearance. It's almost as if Mitsui's in love with Sendoh the abstraction - not Sendoh the person. The vanity is strangely fitting. That's about all I have to say. It was a short fic, but just long enough to do justice to the idea.

Just out of curiosity, does your pen name refer to Chopin's Ballades?

sen x mit squeals ..i love that pairing ...good job ..write more !

Wow! Love the patterning in this fic. Very effective.

Heh, basketball sure is homoerotic, isn't it?

Lovely feel to this :) There are occasional sloppy or redundant bits ("gravity-defying spikes reaching up towards the sky (unnecessary)" "the new tan that's appeared (huh?)") but mostly its quite lovely.

A lot of potential packed into 400 words :) Thanks a lot for writing and sharing .