Maggie from twilight that can tell a lie from the truth, is NOT beautiful. Shes actually really fucking ugly. Nice try though LMFAO. Having Edward check her out in her bikini just makes me think less of Edward.

The way that was written was so weird. First hes making out with her, rubbing his dick on her on second to immediately saying that he wasn't turned on. If he wasn't turned on then why was he rubbing his dick on her?

On different note, is your version of edward a hoe? How may women has he been with?

island? When did that happen? I feel like it came out of nowhere

Edward thinking that he can handle all these other vampires is a fucking joke. Ya he can read minds but isn't he just a stupid 17 year old BOY? And if they're frozen when turned then surely a MAN, especially one that already knew how to fight would put Edwards scrawny ass down.

So I just finished chapter 4 and honestly im bored as hell. Its a bit choppy and confusing. Alice is more annoying then usual made worse by Edwards need to protect her, shes a fucking vampire so why not just let her do her own thing? Edward acts like she needs protecting, like shes human.
I feel like every idea introduced so far could have been told in one chapter instead of 4. You really stretched that shit out. BORING!

Alice seems like a complete fuck tard.

I find it strange that they're supposedly at war but all their talking about is "contestants" and "a challenge". What the hell does that have to do with WAR?

I recently read the Gravity Series and in the first part your story was rec'ed as were a few others. Since she didn't put a summary to it, I was curious and searched for your story and the summary truly picked my interest.
I don't know why you stopped writing/updating, but I can tell you it's very sad that you did! The plot is very interesting and I'd love to see how this ends...

Hope to hear from you, until then;)

funny how Maggie is beautiful in your story when in twilight shes a fugly chubby ginger

I felt like the entire chapter was just a complete waste of fucking time.
and honestly? Edwards a whiny bitch...four fucking chapters of whining about a prophecy he doesn't believe in. Alice is a meddling annoying cunt as always...

how old are they? are they really siblings? wtf?
four chapters of dribble and no fucking background?

alice says he has to have sex with someone else? she tried to force him away from his mate on the beach...bella should kill alice then Maggie then rip Edwards cock off and run away

who is this Maggie bitch?/ lol

wow...6 chapters..that were completely empty. seriously its chapter six and we have no more of the story then we did in chapter 2...is this whole story "empty" just filler chapters?

why are alices eyes red? are Edwards too? wh is Edward so stupid? why in the fuck does he hang out with alice? why don't they stay with their "parents"
why is Edward so protective of alice? it seems more then brotherly to me...it seems like he doesn't want her to have mate
Edward isn't the virgin we all know is he?

Gah! I want more of this! Keep it up, I can't wait! ;)