Hey so it's really interesting but I'm sorta confused...I mean how does ricky and mickey want to annoy deb? Is Ricky and mickey one person with multiple personality disorder? Deb likes one of them? Why do they hav her picture?

This was good, interesting. But a little confusing. It was hard to follow, with the dialogue not being separated, and at one point I couldn't tell if there were multiple people talking to Deb, or just one. If you're putting the character's thoughts, use italics.

Either way, good story, I hope to read more of it. I'd like to see where this is going! Hope I helped a little.

If you could read and review my story, I'd appreciate it. :)