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I'll take, 'What are commas", for ten-thousand!

Maybe go back to grade school and learn what they are, eh?

that is really good. update soon please.

Ok no more... i can't read it anymore this is just pure bullshit, Harry character and personality is just wrong... he was a quiet kid but he get into similar amout of troubles like naruto and god damn he is about 20 years old but he sounds like a 70 years old sage, such a bullshit. You fuck up his training time that he spends on clones like he get help from harry learn it faster then last time which was few hours at least and just as he get's it right iruka and mizuki magically comes... then you have to nerf naruto and made him weaker and more emmotionally unstable then in canon ignoring things like MAYBE TRAINING IN MINDSCAPE AND HIS OCLUMENCY SHIELDS. Another trashy novel where author is not able to comprehend that if MC gets powers from another system like magic in chakra based world then he is supossed to be overpowered not from the start but still. not mentioning that you can't comprehend difrencess between magic and chakra, because if chakra user is not able to use magic then naruto can set up wards and nobody can touch him without another magic user that will tore them down. I read more then 100 harry potter and naruto crossovers and there was maybe 5 that showed proper power balance in fighting, magic is weak in close combat because of that in every rpg game assasin/ninja class is one shoting magic users... but on long range and in damage dealing magic wins. Also in canon naruto beat mizuki without much problems but here he strugles in super fight, it means that he is weaker or more stupid then in canon just WTF.

That was disgusting... it was like harry potter drama all over again... hufflepuff is bad, slytherin is bad let's skip ravenclaw well let's be griffindor. i wanna throw up it was like manipulating naruto ala dumbledore for the greater good. just NO

So he has Harry in his head and nothing from cannon has changed, still failed three times?

Can u let me know now if Naruto is gonna be gay because so far I'm getting feminine vibes and I don't want to waste my time if he is. Also let me know if he is gonna let everyone walk all over him and pretend to be dead last plz reply and let me know I also would like to know if he becomes darkish and not a goofy idiot thx

This story is..

Oof.

A lot is wrong with it.

really i just wasted my time here, what a piece of shit

harry don't even know an ounce of pain naruto is suffering and you are saying he knows how it feels, LOL author LOL

lol

your english is goood, but you holed some info in the fic intro or prologue as you say

First off, Fun story. I must say this is the first "Mindscape" reincarnation I have seen in awhile and you did it excellently. From the way you let Harry and Naruto make a legitimate feeling relationship and let it grow over time in between the timeskips. Which by the way the timeskips were nicely done too none of them really felt too long or seemed cut off before the next part. Anyway will probably be reading the next book soon and am looking forward to where you take this series.

Great job

u got ttto be kidding me...i've been waiting for you to put a twist or chnge that somehow still connects but you just keep on describing the events with few minor change wtf i'm alreDY in chapter 11! if there's no change in at least 3 chapters, i might just abandon or skip tthis to see if you really change nothing much at all. pity as this was poteentially good with magic and HARRY but no you just got to follow canon with very few minor change. you can still follow canon and let them connect ya know if you know the backstories of each characters and how they will potentially react ...