Reviews for Commanding the Tide |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I really enjoy this story. The alternate dynamics from this new Team Avatar is entertaining to read. my only critique is that the flow of the paragraphs are a little weird when delving into characters' thoughts. They tend to get a little repetitive and I would read a word or phrase being repeated in a sentence. The plot is stellar and the occasional repetitiveness of certain sentences isn't enough to put me off. One other critique is that Zuko seems a tad too whiny for having two present parents. Yes, I know Ozai is a jerk, but with Zuko being older now, I imagine he'd be a bit more mellowed out; not quite to the point of season 3 Zuko in the show but he'd have a much more mature personality. I am definitely looking forward to the interaction between the Team and Fire Lord Iroh and Prince Ozai. Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() What a nice little fanfiction. I can even say it follows the canon plot quite nicely while adapting to its current... conditions, I'll say. But I note it hasn't been updated in nearly a year. |
![]() ![]() Write Moreeeeeeeee! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Frickin kill katara and burn her body. The fire nation needs to win |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am VERY afraid of Katara right now... |
![]() ![]() "Dear niece"? Shouldn't Lu Ten be calling her "cousin"? And the present tense in the last line just turned suspense into humour for me... |
![]() ![]() Your tense continues to shift between. Past and present, especially during narration. You might want to get a beta to look at that or proofread a little more because it's really distracting and greatly reduces my respect for the rest of the interesting plot. |
![]() ![]() Well, that relevation about Hama certainly cleared a bit up about hat might be the cause of her prickly demeanour. The plot thickens. As a point of criticism, you should watch your tenses. Occasionally you slip from the past tense to the present tense. |
![]() ![]() So far, it's been a competently AU fic. The Fire Nation is portrayed well and consistently enough to canon despite the AU realm, but I can't help but feel Katara has been excessively vilified. Sokka and Yue, despite the radically different station of the Water Tribes, are recognisable, but Katara feels like some Azula knock-off. I do have to say, though, I found the Fire Nation parts to be tremendously interesting from your characterisation of Ursa and Lu Ten who come alive in the fic with intriguing dynamics to the other characters and Azula's inner narration. |
![]() ![]() Oh snap. Yue's mad and Katara's a bloodbender. |
![]() ![]() I can imagine Azula hating the blood ending part. That was great. Hama is pretty scary and blood bending is just eeekk..can't wait to read the next one! |
![]() ![]() So, some airbenders did survive! Can't wait for the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for the new chapter! It was great as always. hmm maybe there were really different kinds of air nomads back then |
![]() ![]() ![]() I agree with you on the air-Nomads! Cause even though airbenders were among them, there will always be those who were not gifted with the abilities. I mean just look at Sokka and the other characters of the Avatar world! I like your chap! Thanx! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great update as always! Sokka and Azula would totally be frenemies irl. They're both intelligent and are on opposing sides. I can't wait to read the next! |