you made naruto way stronger than canon yet you make him weaker than he was in canon fighting pain

I would definitely recommend this story to anyone, it’s truly very good. I like your twist on Naruto’s strength after the time skip, I honestly would of preferred yours over canons. The only thing that I would criticize is how you never got around to finishing the war ark. With that said I can see it being hard to make it different then canon.
Any ways good story! Definitely recommend.

Hey I thought Naruto saved asuma sarutobi in you fanfiction, then how can he be a edo tensei?

Yes Sakura must die

Good so far

I love this story as well as all of your naruto work!

This has overall been a good book so far but maybe do some editing for some grammar mistakes also making time skips more noticeable as well too?

Honestly I see hardly any worthwhile differences in your fanfic your basically copying cannon completely with minor unimportant differences like naruto being stronger but even then still doesn’t change the events and the poor excuse of romance with Yugito. Theirs no build up in the romance they immediately fall in love barely knowing each other. Just seems you care about making smut out of their realtionship then actually making it meaningful. Sorry but just the truth

I always found it annoying that Tsunade never promoted naruto after returning from the time skip to at least chuinin.

I know you haven’t updated this story in over 5 years but since the original Naruto manga/ anime series and Naruto Shippuden manga/ anime series have been completed I was actually hoping that you come back and finish this fanfiction story all the way to the end of the Fourth Shinobi World War and may be even to the start of the Boruto series but with obvious differences like Yugito surviving (not having her tailed beast extracted), marrying Naruto and having children with him. I am saying and asking this because I have never seen a fanfiction story this realistically similar to the main canon storyline but so different at the same time and all of the filler chapters are not overblown, oversimplified and dragged out. In fact the way you fit in the filler chapters in between the main storyline chapters was actually perfect. I saw no flaws or errors whatsoever (except from the grammar and spelling mistakes). I really would like to see this fanfic completed. It would be such a shame if you left your story like it is right now. I was also hoping that you go back and fix ALL of your spelling errors, although it will take a long considering how long the story is.

I like it.

Is this being updated here or on senju naruto's page cause I just looked there and didnt see anything

Ok you seem to consistently misspell a word here. It’s DOES not dose. Context being he does 600 laps of Konoha on his hands. Not he was so high after a dose of heroine he THOUGHT he did 600 laps

in the first chapter Jiraya says Naruto has a lot of hidden talent now he says he got none! Jiraya isn't the nice guy who would train the worst performersunless they are a genius in hiding. Naruto was only taught because of the fox and the connection to Minato. Even then he scammed and neglected Naruto for two years leaving a Naruto who didn't learn anytging new besides a bigger Rasengan. With his shadow clone learning he should have become a walking jutsu library within two years

Shadow clone is an À rank jutsu, not a B rank one