Reviews for Akuma no Buntai: Kitsune, Ryu, Tanuki |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Im Dropping This Sorry. It Seemed Like A Fairly Good Story Until The Wave ARC. First Gaara, Sakura, And Naruto Give Off Vital Information To Konoha Ninja That They Supposedly "Hate". Giving Away Answers To Vital Questions Simply Because They Were Asked. "So Where Are You Guys From?". "Oh You Know We Were Born In Konoha.". Lets Not Forget The Encounter With Team 7 And The Sound Shinobi Where They Give Away Their Faces And Names For Legit No Reason. And Next On That List Would Be The Chunin Exams First They Say They Won't Engage Orochimaru Or Interfere With Anything. Then They Deliberately Attack On Of His Summons To Free Kota. After That They Prevent The Dosu, Kin, And Zaku From Attacking Team 7 Not Only Allowing The Enemy To Escape (Even Though They're Supposed To Be A Ruthless Team Of Ninja) , But Also Allowing Said Enemies To Report Their Current Skill Set To Orochimaru. Which Could Never Happen And Simply Be Covered Up As "Plot". |
![]() ![]() Why bold? If everything in bold was in italics, it would be much easier to read. For example, when Itachi was explaining the bit about the Kage, there were multiple bold words jumping out and swallowing up the normal words. When the scenes changed, it was hard to not miss because it was in italics. |
![]() ![]() Aww, that's sad. But at least you ended the first part of the story and did not leave it hanging. Thanks anyway for the reading experience, it was very fun while it lasted. I hope you continue to make quality stories like this! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don't know why every japanese word is in bold italic but it doesn't help reading. At all. It's annoying. Changing word in italic and/or bold is a tool for the writer to accentuate things in his story that he wants to accentuate, or to give another meaning to a word or a phrase and to catch the reader's attention. All this is doing right now is shooting "look ! I use word in another language !" If it helps you to make the translation list at the end of the chapter, you need to edit your work before you publish it. If there is another reason, I would like to understand if you want to explain. Otherwise, it's a good story. I think it's a little odd that Sakura and Naruto hate their village considering Itachi isn't really a traitor (and he loves Konoha) but I can roll with it. I wonder how Akastuki will change their plan since they already have two biju. |
![]() ![]() ![]() IT WAS AMAZING WHILE IT LASTED! THANKS FOR WRITING A BADASS STORY! |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG I'M TEARING UP AGAIN! T-T IT'S FEELS AFTER FEELS! |
![]() ![]() ![]() T_T THE FEELS! THEY'RE KILLING MEEEEEEE! DX |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm really enjoying this so far. I like the way each character is portrayed, it's a good escalation of their characters and who they'll turn out to be. The chapters are long, and I'm actually reading the descriptions of the things the characters talk about. And that's something I barely do. (I should do it more often, whoops) I also appreciate that you've made a glossary at the bottom, I recognized only a few of the Japanese words you mentioned. So thank you for that. I'm going to keep reading now, until my eyes fall out or I fall asleep. Amazing writing so far. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just so I'm sure that I have this right just your Naruto stories are the ones discontinued not all your stories |
![]() ![]() This story was amazing and the end just came as a punch in the gut for me because it's happened to me before so I carefully look at the descriptions to find any hidden 'discontinued's or anything of the sort. It would be really appropriate for you to put it in the description, please, to avoid any situations like this in the future. Had I any writing talent I would try and give this some closure, but unfortunately, I don't. You are an awesome writer, so just keep the good stories coming, ok? :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey just letting you know I enjoyed your story, thanks for leaving it up or I would never have read it. Best wishes in any other writing ventures Darkest |
![]() ![]() Kidloco I know the feeling mostly the end.. kishi fuck it that bad but im still in naruto forum, mostly ns forever But i think in my opinion not need to erace it, Just put end and let others still read it when is need it, more now when the shit of huano fans Will troll whit they shit, so need every ns fanfic there to Let them not win, beside you fanfic are good, im still writing mines and had some in waiing, im back with narusaku arise and still writing chapter 5 and almost read y chapter 6 I re coment not erace it, Just leave there whit saying the end |
![]() ![]() ![]() while i will miss reading this story, I do understand how interest can be lost. I will say this, instead of deleting have someone adopt the story so it can be continued. Even if some of it will change it can still be read by others. After all the greatest crime in fanfiction is an unfinished story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nooooo! Keep this one up I actually like this one there are so few good what if stories out there... Come on! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is one of my favorite time to read. As the characters for Naruto, Sakura and Garra, they are the best character you describe them. I wish you can keep this instead of deleted. Thank you for letting me read. I can keep this memory reading for my thought. :) |