No está mal.
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Not bad.

Great ending

To bad Will is hardly in this.

Great so far

Well, that's definitely something different. Well done.

I enjoyed reading this. It was an interesting take on Warren and emotional maturation.

I liked very much how you offer a vision of the feelings and thoughts of a gray one, between two worlds where hi doesn't fit. I liked very much the little quotes. They give you a quick image of a possible pass or situation that shaped him. Very nice story.

Dude this is awesome! I'm usually very picky bout fanfics but this is awesome to the extreme

Awesome.

well damm. Id really love to see you take a crack at this world right here, to make your own twist on it. A nice ending and WOW that was intresting. well damm Id have to thank you for finishing this, it was worth it but seriously Id love it if you did some work in this universe or something. DAMM this was a more believeable ending anyway.
Warren defeniatly was one of the more intresting charecters anyway in that SHow Will Strong hold had some interesting ideas behind him, but still he was a minor one.
A good way to end it, especially the fact ht at the fight diddnt get drawn out where Royal pain could use here experience both Warren and Will went all out and all.
It was smart to notice that Will did not fight well at all but he had to rely completly on his strength.
intresting ending for warren as well. Also it broke Royal pain more than anything else after the movie I couldent help but think that it diddnt solve the issues and all.

But yeah the sidekicks really DID kick it up into full gear.

i got to say the way you took this was surprising, by the last line I thought Warren would have killed here the system might fall down and theyd deal with that but it be mostly Warren and the sidekicks dealing with one anohter as they brought everybody back from as a baby.
YOu have to love as well the fact that everybody freaking parted right afterwords again Anyway as well.
out of the side kicks Id have to say that orange good was the most helpfull and all.
But yeah much as Lylas talk about the side kick system being outdated and all Id think the sidekick system needed a kick in the head a bit more SIdekicks like RObin you know? sure lesser than the hero but somedayt hey migh be heros themselves you know? well the RObin thing was more an apprentice than ...
anyway a nice job, Id be awesome to see all the adults reactions and stuff or like the lawyars an the poliece, but this is a good ending.
Good job and thank you!

you know before and all I kind of wondered how much a fight all the pre heros did at the ball. and I am suddenlt reminded that the hell they cut away before stuff could go down so some of them pobably DID fight but all the adult heros, not only did Gwen take them down first the Commander and jetstream were the only activer heros you know? plus with Penny, Speed, and Lash all out their and all they could have beatn back anyone that escaped like Warrens group.

I like how Warrens having dbouts about ina REASONABLE manner without losing his stuff.

I suddenly realized something she was going to raise ALL of them and I imagine that in alot of ways shed be horrible but I guarentee you that even the weak side kicks would get ALOT better under her tutalage, if their powers arnt that usefull make a suit that will, if a power needs something to upgrade it Gwen could have made it.

but WOW Warren is an intresting fella in all of this and he desnt do it with a BREACK down and all the crying and stuff.
Its funny in a way that Warren and Gwen were dating but were up front 'dating" some freshmen. bit odd arnt they?

WOW you covered how freaking insane Gwen was i mean in the show while its beyond horrofying her trying to steal and Raise(the hell) kids but I kind of wonder on that especially with her going throught it, are they all awar of whats going on but cant DO anything aobut it? but its very nice that you had it shown physically. Gwen is actually very dependant aint she? wonder what a grown woman(cause as she was around the commanders age so aorund the age of Strongholds mom soo probably not that much of an "old lady"
but yeah I can she how someone lonely like Warren(cause he was regardless of if he was ok with it) would be attracted to this. i also like how you broke up how the charectere reat to each other, Penny while having a good pwoer is to bratty to use it properly and all you know?
in alot of ways Layla, Warren, and Royal Pain are ALOT more dangerous that Will.
but I also liked how you covered the friendships with the sidekicks and everything at the end of he movie I was kind of "the hell" at the best friend scene cause I get it worked really well but they only realy talked cival once you know? SO its intresting how Warren does on stuff like that.

Also Warren thinking "good" people just beat on their friends to see sense, well kind of funny and sobering considering their in a super hero world.

But I really like Warren's initiation into this as well she just gives him good stuff, beats on him but nothing truely Horrible yet.

I got to wonder though what in the hell Lash, Speed and Penny tough of raising some brats,like All of the emotions cause I dont believe that theyd only have ONe reaction to it you know? I was always cofused about Gwen who was "daddy little girl" thing it was incredibly odd and all.

So yeah and again UPDATE! RAWWWWW! Clif hangers like chapter five are EVIL especially right at the CLimax!

yeah love the jokes on that but now evil is courting Warren!

but yeah Warren Stronghold, Royal Pain, and Layla have POWER behind their abillites everyone else just has to get more skilled, while the others can get more powerfull and skilled.
I wonder what powers his mom had thought and how that affected his make up. but yeah that IS intresting for Warren
but yeah I liked how you picked up on how tough Warren is. probably gets it from his dad if his dad was strong enough to count as one of the "Commanders" big accomplishment.

but yeah the web is stirring it gonna be intresting right their.

Wo now that was a creepy start! Always wondered on why she diddnt go after him(besides it bieng a kids movie) but even with that I have to imagine that she diddnt want any chalengers for later you know? but yeah it is AWESOME right then and there and all. SO yeah Ive read the entire thing of this and Im kind of curious on where THE END IS AT!?

YES! CAN YOU GIVE US THE NEXT CHAPTER? WE NEED THE AFTERMATH!