Wow. May I say this is an amazon pice of work. I really liked the style of writing you used and it really suited this story, you used the words that fit together like peanut butter and honey( which means that they worked well together, because peanut butter and honey is really yummy and I suggest it if you haven't already had it) :)

Your English seems to be fine in the story, there were no huge mistakes that I could see (and I'll be honest, I usually don't notice the small ones.)

Interesting way to write this story, little snap shots of major events of Charles' life. I like how he finally gained a sister after all that loss.

Good job.