Hahaha, enjoyed reading this! Bye

gotta love caring harvey!

Loved it :)

I was sure you would murder the grandma... XD

Great story. You really handle the characters. :)

And just so you know... Caring Harvey is also some kind of an adiction, and your fictions are big part to manage it ;D

i love it 1! XD

too true. i love caring harvey and my flatmate that i got to watch the series does as well. loved the story!

Even more adorableness! XD :)

I love all of your suits stories!

I find myself at a loss on how to start this fiction's review. That is to say, I like the story you've written. It was imaginative and creative... but I didn't just fall in LOVE with it as I do most of your other stories. Maybe it's just the mood I'm in or maybe it's just because I can't love all of your stories with the same passion I normally have. In any case, this review will probably be shorter and focus more on critiquing your grammar and spelling than just mushing over the story itself.

The beginning sort of sets the mood for the story. Harvey's in a bad mood, and the plot doesn't shift from this negative aspect until the very end. As I've brought up before (and I'll wait once again until your later fictions after my first review to really get into it), you need to watch comma uses. For instance, your sentence "Today though he was just irritated and he was going to instill the fear of God AND Harvey into Mike in order to get that file done by the end of the day" would flow better if you had used more commas: "Today, though, he was just irritated, and he was going to instill the fear of God AND Harvey into Mike in order to get that file done by the end of the day." Commas help the reader follow your line of thought, so don't be afraid to use them more often.

Another thing to watch out for (and something I swear I've brought up before, but I'll do it again as a "just in case" kind of thing) is semicolons. Connecting two COMPLETE sentences means you MUST use a semicolon. "He wasn't typing, he wasn't looking at anything (the screen on a black spread sheet) and he certainly wasn't working." is incorrect in multiple ways, but the first one I saw was the semicolon. I've also talked about rewording before so you don't have to use parenthesis. "He wasn't typing; he wasn't looking at anything, obvious by the black spread sheet that glowed on his screen; and he certainly wasn't working" just looks so much neater and more professional.

It's always great to get things from Harvey's point of view. In this story, he's completely in denial - brushing aside his legitimate concern and calling it "curiosity" in order to maintain that uncaring indifference. But he IS concerned, which is noticeable the moment he finds out what's wrong with Mike. And then he let Mike leave when he CLEARLY needed him to finish everything up! If that's not caring, I don't know WHAT is, m'dear!

Won't lie; it's great to imagine Harvey... in a hot, steamy shower... naked... -dreamy face-

And then Harvey just SEES through everything. As always, he hits the nail on the head when it comes to Mike. Mike just lets everything go, and Harvey OFFERS TO GO OVER! Once again, he puts away his personal wants and needs in order to take care of Mike. Freaking adorable, I tell you!

I like your interpretation of Harvey's reaction to seeing where Mike lived. Honestly, their ways of living couldn't be more different. And they sit down just like old friends would, drinking beer and talking. Only this conversation has an ominous tone to it as well. Mike's honest about how he feels, completely vulnerable and alone. Being the bigger man (and I think with a mixture of understanding), Harvey decides to sort of comfort MIke. He might not be the best at it, but he got the job done. And I thought it was particularly Harvey-like to then throw the attention on Donna as well. He quickly mentions he's there, but spends more time referring to Donna afterwards.

Even so, Harvey's honest. Life isn't sunshine, rainbows, and unicorns. Shit happens; IT'S! unavoidable (in reference to the incorrect use of the homophone at that part of the story). But then afterwards he sets his grounds. He tells Mike how it is and nothing more. The ending joke was a nice finishing touch.

Over all, good story. Not my favorite - not one I'm passionate about... but it was a good read. I hope to hear from you soon.

Sincerely,

Luna Engel

Awwww, so sweet :-)

Hehehehehheheheh! I'm addicted!

" It looked like it had been built when New York was declared a state ..." LOL. LOOOLL. I LOVE that line... to death. Made me literally laugh out loud, even in the midst of such a touching story. Very very well done, I loved it all :)

~Nayah

Fantastic story! I love it! As always, it is wonderful to see Harvey show that he cares. I loved the stuff about Trevor and Jenny. I thought it was a great touch that Mike would forget to eat in college and they took care of him. (You should totally think about writing a story were Harvey does it... :) hint, hint...) Thanks again for sharing you wonderful story!

It's always refreshing to read a great story!

Nice job!

Cute story. :)

And it's kinda a good prequel/sequel to the episode where Trevor asked Mike to bail him out of jail. Remember that conversation between Trevor and Mike about Harvey being a good friend. Mike said he was not his friend, just his boss. The Trevor said that Harvey didn't help because he needed it, he did it for Mike.

That was a good episode, and this is a good story. Well done.