Hello there. I think you've got something good going on here. This is an interesting premise for a story, and it really brings out John's sense of moral value, so that's good. Also, your writing style is very descriptive, which is nice. A couple pointers, if you don't mind also. There are a few spelling and grammar things throughout this story, but really nothing major, maybe check it over again once or twice :). And you need to have a warning on this story for Rape/Non-con, on the 13 chapter, at least, and maybe even in your summary or frst chapter as well. Rape is a serious trigger for many people, so despite the fact that it is a spoiler, you absolutely have to put a warning here. Finally, although I love that you put lots of description, I (personally) find that there might be a little too much of a metaphorical sense, especially in the 14 chapter. That's just my opinion though; I just found it distracted from the plot a bit. Otherwise, you're doing a great job; keep up the good work. I do really enjoy this story, and I hope you don't find I was too harsh. :)

OMG! I can't wait till you continue, hopefully soon. Bye.

just. WHY? ;_;

damn, now I have to see how this continues. because I need a good ending or I might just die from sadness

Your writing style is very original. I really like it. I wish you weren't such a sadist, though :P

Devastation :o your no updated ness is killing me :p please update soon, this is breaking my heart :p

P.S I love this story because this reminds me of Lolita in an alternate universe _

Oh. No. I'm devastated. I hadn't expected Jim to do that because I was so focused on Friday for them. Be fixable Sherlock.

I admit, when I read the summary, I thought this was an awfully weird wrench to throw at canon. Have everyone's age relationship be the same except for Watson, who's older. It sounds almost like an excuse to write someone with the now-17 Sherlock.

Well, then I read it, and I liked it a lot, because as much as you change, you don't belabor the point needlessly, and in the end, it's still enough to change Watson's view on many things. Somehow, it not only works, but you integrated it into the canon.

Thanks for writing, and I can't wait to read what happens from here!

Yeah, this really needs a warning for what's in the 13th chapter.

WTF? WTF? Oh my gods what what What WHAT? Rape! Really really! Oh my gods ahhhhhhhh no no no no not Sherlock no that's just ... You should have put a warning! Wahhhhhhh no so sad I can't take it i feel like crying! Your story is so good and well written but gods you should have put an angst warning because damn that came out of no-where and holy shit! Good gods I hope there's a happy ending and this is just one horrible horrible dream!

Please please please update this soon! I have to know what happens, and it's so good!

Can't wait for the next chapter! :D :D

OMG! I NEED THE NEXT CHAPTER. THIS IS BRILLIANT!

My goodness... No, Sherlock's couldn't possibly be...dead? Can he? Please update soon! You may very well deprive me of another peaceful night!

lol, great update!

Please, please, please get them together, please let John realise this, with Sherlock, is his fate and they are soulmates, true love because I can't bear to see them torn like this!

By the way, loved the phone call S made to J - look how much be truley wants you J *shakes head*

this is always so brilliantly written - I cannot wait for the next update :-D

I am so in love with this. I don't know how many times I've written that but I really really reaaaallllyyy adore this story.

Your writing is gorgeous. "by Sherlocks invincible winter his love is made afraid" - i adore that, madly. that & ' & precious'.

You create such beautie in words, brilliant imagery that paints the mind.