Damn bro! You gotta update this book! This story is awesome! Hope karna's abilities manifest in shiro. Can't wait for the next chapter!

I thought excalibur was EX... meh. And she doesn't have Avalon anymore right? In canon it was inside shirou. In this one I don't know? She never had avalon as a servant. She would be as you say 'bullshit OP' if she did.

Oh, Invisible Air? Well, it's apparently for concealing Excalibur. After all, a Servant's True Name shows off everything about their biography, considering they're remembered through history.

And apparently, whoever sees Excalibur knows exactly what it is. And who wields Excalibur again? King Arthur Pendragon.

Wait, is this Jack Alter or what? Confused af rn.

Isn't her eyes suppose to be green?

This story has so far been incredibly interesting and well written. I hope to see you return to writing this in the future.

An interesting take. Too bad it's dead.

great very nice

great great

great

So no Archer EMIYA this time huh.

I'm kinda confused for the characters changes.
So in a nutshell Shinji ain't that a prick here. Sakura kinda strong to her personality.
Illya not that a psychotic loli but warmth girl by her father? How does that work with the Einzbern pissed off to what happen?

This was an interesting story. Im a sucker for alternate timelines and character interpretations, so this was an enjoyable read. However, I feel I must mention the elephent in the room: the Shirou/Assassin ship teasing. While her exact age isn’t really known, Jack is most definately a child in both body and psych, and it made me really uncomfortable to read about Shirou, a late teenager, and his attraction to her. I could make a joke about Shirou being a priest as a reason, but I will refrain. If you ever continue this story, I would recommend maybe shifting away from that type of relationship. However, Jack’s overprotectiveness makes sense. Shirou is by far the best thing that ever happened to her, so it would make sense that she would be murderously vigilent in her protection of him. Not to mention Jack has a natural dislike of magi because of how she died, so her disliking Rin makes sense.

Well this was an astoundingly good story. Definitely one of the best Fate/Stay Night fanfictions that I've read so far. It's certainly a shame that it's dead

Ha, thinking in a less asshole Shinji and comes Francis Drake, fair