YOUR SHIT IS FUCKING THE SHIT :):):)(;(;(;

This was amazing; I'd say you should make Ayato x Touka [From Tokyo Ghoul, even though this is extremely old lol].

Really why the hell do you read it when it the warning is there there whole lot incest in fanfiction harry potter twilight vampire diaries honestly people fanfiction isnt innocent it bound to have sex stories lemon in other word.
you did good dont stop from writing your not the one who writes stories like this it all over the fanfiction site good job

Very nice. Thanks for uploading! :-)

Nice job I liked it XD

Incest.

Really? Why can't people watch normal porn?

From the Rules & Guidelines:

"Please note FanFiction does not accept explicit content, Fiction Rating: MA, and the rating is only presented for reference."

Reported for containing MA sexual content.

Tueur à gages jaune

me encanto!
muy buen fic esta genial y ame el lemon!
amo esta pareja!

What the fuck? Seriously, what the fuck is wrong with you? Do you even realize how fucked up and LIFE-DAMAGING incest really is?

You’re story glorifying homosexual incest is disgusting, perverted, and abominable. There is no love in incest- only lust and the sick, mentally fueled desire to gratify the physical wants of a sexual DISORDER.

On a scientific level, humans have a chemical mechanism in their brain that is supposed to be there to prevent genetically close relatives from having sex. If someone commits incest regardless, then either they are so mentally, emotionally, and/or morally far-gone that they consciously rebel against their very instincts, or they lack that chemical mechanism, meaning that they have a genetic disorder.

I don’t give a shit that you made it consensual in the story because in REAL LIFE on an emotional and mental level, both participants of incest end up more fucked up afterwards, not “closer than ever before” according to your story’s sick tale of brotherly “love” between Federico and Ezio.

Speaking of which, do you even realize how anti-canon and OOC your story is? Or is the fantasy of Ezio and Federico having an incest relationship a “reality” in your sick mind? Do you get off at the thought of two siblings having sex? Or do you believe incest is normal? Because I can’t think of any other reasons that would explain why you are so comfortable with writing such a sickening, life-damaging, and evil act like incest.

And last but not least, your story’s explicit sex scene violates the rating-system rules set by FanFiction. Copy-pasted directly from the Guidelines:

"Content Ratings:

FanFiction adopts the rating system from FictionRatings(d)com.

Please note FanFiction does not accept explicit content, Fiction Rating: MA, and the rating is only presented for reference."

"[MA] Content is only suitable for mature adults. May contain explicit language and adult themes."

Reported.

Delete this fic, or wait for the admins to do it for you, and take your overrated and trashy gay porn somewhere else.

I thought this story was very hot. Let's get that out of the way to begin with here *laughs* That's my less educated reaction to this story.

I think it was very well written, though obviously a few points where the wrong tense of a word was used and the switching between past and present-tense. All in all, it was very good, but having a beta reader wouldn't be amiss. You only have a few small issues :3

You are a very wonderful writer, as I stated on the review for your other one. You have so much talent :3

this was awesome!

*fläktar sig själv* WHOA. Vad var detta? VAD. VAR. DETTA? Jag blir ju helt knäckt, så bra det är! Jag har funderat över många tänkbara pairings i AC-serien, men aldrig Federico och Ezio! Och här kommer du och gör något helt otroligt så att jag måste snoka bland resten av dina oneshots - och så är du SVENSK. Man blir ju bara så glad, så glad! 8D

I VILKET FALL. Fantastiskt välskrivet, in-character hela vägen igenom, och vissa beskrivningar fick min inre författare (som är mera aktiv i teorin än i praktiken atm -.- ) att vrida sig förtjust i stolen och klappa händer! Denna oneshot har frälst ännu en AC-fangirl till Auditorecest, var stolt!

This is very well written, and I liked the pacing of the story. You are very good at depicting the scenes, and if I read your profile right, English isn't your first language? *Very* well done story, and quite good for your third lemon. :3 And yes, writing smut is exhausting. *laughs*

I'll ask this first, before I go into anything: How well do you take constructive criticism?

There are only a few things that I thought would improve the story, but I don't want to come off as harsh, and my suggestions can be very detailed. How detailed do you want me to be?