if you could continue this i would be soo happy to read i want to know what happens altho i get it if you couldnt think of a way to continue the story it would be awsome however if you did

Please continue this! :)

Very intriguing! I'm looking forward to seeing where this is taking us.

I would say, just be careful about your shift in tenses. I think it's in the second chapter you swap from past to present simple, both viable on their own, but not compatible within chapters :)

I hope your updates are as often as they have been so far! Keep it up!

Sorry for being so Kate to read this chapter, somehow I didn't read the email... Anyway, what are you talkig about? I love this chapter! Update soon!

Damn you fir being such a good writer. -_- I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!

Roy Sr Vs. Roy Jr, what is going to happen? O_o I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapter! C:

Ooooooooooh...suspense I love it!

This story is starting out great; I love a good mystery!

And so the plot thickens.

I'm confused, is the guy that planted the fake bombs some random Ishbalan that's obsessed with Roy? And does he have anything to do with Roy (the Colonel's dad)? Or is this just a coincidence? Or did Roy Sr. Follow the other guy there (like on a mission or something, not stalkerish.)? I MUST KNOW!

Please update soon

"Oh lieutenant, you're no fun." Ahh how I enjoyed that comment xD

To not complain in burning hat and freezing cold? Thts insane, I cud nevr do tht...

Omg Roys dad came back. Wat if he frames uh... hmm... oh! Wat if he frames roy-boy? Gasp.

Plz. Continue. Now! :D

The beginning made me feel a little awkward since I don't rly like it wen ppl guess ppls names. It bugs me alot. But its just me I suppose.

But I really liked the end! It was writen really well!

Although the sudden fact that adele died was rushed, I liked this chapter. I think the plots coming along real well

Sooo keep up the good work :)

How interesting! I want to know more! C: keep up the good work! And you have a great vocabulary!

Eeeeh! Happy! Royai! :-D And what the flip is with the white-haired guy? O.o

~Glow

Yea, too lazy to log in.

Anyway, SUSPENSE. SEXUAL TENSION. (They're like my two favorite things ever ' This is why I always ship the less blatantly obvious couples.)

Couldn't really form an opinion with just the prologue :/ but it seemed interesting! A little confusing with the two Roy Mustang though. And I hope the murderer of Adele will be revealed at some point in the story! :)