Hey Michael, Trust exercise, you ever been deep sea diving? *DRIVES CAR OFF BRIDGE*

Nice.

eh, feels like some of it is a different story with the serial numbers filed off. the first person bits are jarring, and Ziva occasionally becomes Isabel.

That being said, the fic is enjoyable, and the dog in me wonders if he can charm kate, something canon dinozzo never did.

Honestly, I'm surprised Abby never happened. They were good friends, and Ari had her leaning that way...

Okay, now I get it, Kate being dead would be a major downer and probably poison any possibility there.

You keep slipping in and out of third person sentence structure

who is Isabel? haha ;D
great story but a lot of mistakes and you can't seem to decide if you're writing from an i or he perspective...
still one of my favorites 3

Very good AU! Wished it was longer but good nonetheless.

Sug

I really like the interesting and unique background of this story; however, the changes from1st person to 3rd person p.o.v. (Me, he) can be rather confusing. Still, you did a great job with dialog between characters. Keep up the good work and know that I enjoyed reading this story.

I can see Mr. Paladin, all in black, riding his horse. Great writing.

I don't know if you're aware, but you have sometimes called Ziva 'Isabelle', was this intentional?

Dull, millionaire who likes to read... well they got millionaire right.

Really enjoyed the plot and the character developments, as well as your carefully crafted AU. There are numerous grammar/spelling/tense slips which jar the fluidity of this, which is a shame because the content is brilliant. I would advise having a beta reader glance over it - it is already great, but has the potential to be better. Anyway, great work and thanks for sharing it :)

love it

This needs to be edited badly. Either English isn't your first language, this is adapted from one of your own stories and you changed most of the names but Isabel still showed up a couple times, or this is plagiarized. How can you post a story that keeps going between third and first person? The writing style also seemed overly descriptive and didn't have very good flow.

Ah! Bravo bravo bravo! Loved it times a billion and three! Amazing. Only thing was the me's that would creep in, but other than that, it was perfsct. I loved the plot line, Elsbeth, everyone! :)

I JUST LOVE YOUR WRITING! i LOVE YOUR TIVA!mORE MORE MORE STORIES LIKE THAT.

Nice end Tony gets the girl. Loved how they got Kort, he is slimy and Rivkin, wonder if he drowned or what