Gohan's charm is getting to him.
Love your writing.

I love, love, LOVE how Piccolo didn't know the definition of certain words, or lacked their prescense in his vocabulary - perfect!

That was SO sweet...

that was the cutest story! i love the warmth and fuzz that accompanies such a story. piccolo and gohan are best friends forever! aw! cuteness!

*satisfied sigh* Are all your stories this good? I'll have to read them all, then. :)

That is most likly the best look into Piccolo's mind I have yet to see I have read many fics concerning Piccolo but you are the first to truly understand the complexity that is Piccolo. I have always believed him to be a little afraid of love considering it's something denied to him since birth you are also the first writer that has come to the conclusion that the very man Piccolo wanted to destroy (Goku) is also the very reason for his birth. Nice job!

Wow i loved it! All your fics rock!

aw. i loved it. it was so sweet and not even ooc w/all that sweetness. wonderful job.

*wearing an idiotic grin* Sorry. *tries and fails to stop grinning* I always start grinning like this when I read something nice like that.

Hey Onyx!

Wow, that was an amazing story, I am pretty much stunned now by searching for the right words I want to use.

Usually, when reviewing I take a clip from a part of the story that really astounded or amused me. But I can't with yours, because it seemed the whole story was like that all the way through. THIS IS A GREAT STORY. Your writing is flawless, and your descriptions are dead on, very graceful and poetic.

I loved your angle from this story. The way you described Piccolo as knowing about goku, but not really knowing about Goku. Why he wanted to kill him and why he obsessed like he did. it was a great point and I was amused the whole way through. Thank you for this awesome story, it's definately one of the best Piccolo fics out there. I have to say my favorite part was when Gohan was crying because he had a dream that Piccolo died...that was too cute, I almost cried!

This is great. Keep up the great work and excellent writing. This was an awesome story, its only natural you could have got the idea from Bucky, she's such an awesome author and she does great Piccolo stuph :) Well, thanks again and keep it up! Love ya and God bless ya!

In Christ,

Tenshi

You did a great job characterizing Piccolo and his isolation, both physical and emotional, from other beings.

It was a really great fic.

Arw... that's incredibly sweet. Your characterization is amazing. You have Piccolo down pat. I'm so glad I read this, as despite the fact that I adore Piccolo, I've been unable to put him into words. Now I think I'll be able to. :)

This was a really great story! I like how you portray Piccolo. He's so right on character! :)

BTW, I've noticed that you 'twist' the name of Son Goku when you are referring to his first name (not only in this but also in your other stories). In Japanese, you first have the family name, then the given name. So, if you'd transfer the name to our system, he'd be called Goku Son. It would be Mr. Son (in our system) if he was adressed formally and Goku if someone talked to him using his first name. :)

But that's just a minor glitch. I'm looking forward to read more of your excellent stories. Keep on writing!

*sigh* Oh man was that ever beautiful. You do such an incredible job with Piccolo's character, almost like you know him. Honestly, do you have him hidden in your closet? I wonder *grin*.

Beautiful work - just like everything else you've done. _

*pulls hair out* This is the third time I'm filling out this window! The first, I filled it in as I went and then accidentally erased it all when I clicked on the review button out of habit. THEN the second time, I lost the connection and it wouldn't refresh the screen... *whimper* So now, here's a REALLY paraphrased bit of all the wonderful praise I gave you the first couple times... (you deserve so much more!)

You do Piccolo's introspective bit flawlessly. No one can out do you there. You show him as confused, conflicted (as only he could be, being intrinsically good with a legacy of evil!), alone, sad...and just before it teeters on OOC you snap him right back into the demon. The Villain that we are introduced to in DB.

You praise other people on staying in character for Piccolo, but no one does it better than you, Onyx. Straight up. No one. You're amazing.

And I always rely on crutches like dialogue, action, or sexual tension to keep the reader's attention, but YOU! You have this amazing ability to go inside a character's head and make it more intense than the climax of a war movie. Absolutely amazing!

I love how you demonstrate Piccolo's inner conflict with not having the vocabulary to describe something as beautiful as a sunset, or anything non-harsh for that matter. WHAT A GREAT DETAIL! Where do you come up with this stuff?

And Gohan. Wow. I stopped commenting all together for that whole last scene cuz I was too damn busy enjoying it! His need to be comforted and touched rang true for a child, and Piccolo's reaction flowed naturally and also rang true for his character. His confusion, and reluctant permittance of such an affectionate gesture - and then brief insight that it might have made him feel better.

And OH! How you wrote his perception of that 'hurt' that Gohan made him feel. We call it tugging on heart strings, but he had no idea what to make of it, and you expressed that so perfectly with your writing!

And how the heck to you do the angle of a child so well? I have a helluva time, and I'm a mom! Most people tend to make the child sound more mature than they are, but you kept it Gohan innocent and ignorant. That whole scene rang true, and had major impact. Loved the whole thing.

There was more...so much more *sigh* But alas, the brain is turning off...

I LOVED THIS FIC! I LOVE EVERYTHING YOU WRITE! I enjoy other authors, but none impress me like you can. You're at the top of my list, girl (and you'd be there whether or not you knew me! I don't put people in my fav. auth. section for favors, and I'm picky as hell!) because nothing you do is just par. It's always excellent.

Ok. Enough. I'd have read this sooner, but I didn't know you posted it! Thanks for another amazing read.

btw - wtg. for your next chapter, missy! Finals are over, right? :) Hook me up! You need to get that story out there so people can start reading it! Also, thanks for reading that first chapter of the Nail fic. After I finished it, I realized that it might be something down your alley, and was kinda hoping you'd click on it. So thank you :)