She's a door mat, and he's a total asshat. And, I just noticed it's incomplete so I'm tapping out.

Makes no sense. If she has a class, [school] on Monday mornings, how could she accept a job that would take up her Monday? She's on a scholarship, she would lose it.

OK, so I have always fiercely been a Team Edward and really, really disliked Jake. HOWEVER, this story has Edward as a complete douchey-asshat and thank god for Jake because he finally gave Edward the punch he deserved!

I hate unfinish d stories ! I wish that the writers would post on the intro that the work was unfinished .

TEE HEEE HEE "WHAT IS IT?" I ASKED SHYLY

SHYLY? your shy with a guy that you've seen use women for sex? that treats you like shit? that kisses girls whilst staring at you? with a fucking smirk! a man that threatens to call the cops over one punch like a pussy?

Edwards a pussy and bellas a fucking idiot

you make her weak over and over again...do you know the most obvious sign that your a victim is? its not learning from your mistakes! Edward gets it on with firecrotch right after being with bella so she does the right thing and leaves...FINIALLY then he comes to the door and she does the right thing and tells him to leave...but then she fucking follows him like AN IDIOT! you don't show your fucking hand like that, you don't chase him! let him do the fucking chasing! and when a man crosses the line like Edward did, you LEAVE HIM BEHIND

did bella just have sex with the disgusting manwhore? um...wtf?
why is bella a weak victim? NO MAN that fucking plays games like that would get to fuck me! make out with another woman if front of me? kiss two women whilst fucking smirking at me? your fucking done!

so Edwards takes home firecrotch...makes out with fire crotch right in front of her...fucks fire crotch in his office while bella is right outside...then hes all over two hoes at the club all whilst smirking at bella...and now he has a sad look on his face and that somehow erases all of that for bella?

why does bella keep allowing Edward to treat her like that? She clearly would have let Edward fuck her on the conference table...RIGHT after he fucked FIRECROTCH!

bellas a dumb bitch and I no longer have any respect for her!

so she left him at the club and he went home and fucked Victoria? and now hes making out with her right in front of bella...that is the line in the motherfucking sand!
Right there is when the fire would die out...chapter 10 is where the Edward/bella story should fucking die. Edward is nothing but a piece of shit whore. And bella should send whoreward a bill for the shirt she gave him... Also she should quit her job and leave town...who in the fuck would want Edward AFTER hes fucked fire crotch? no one wants herpes.

why act like Edwards some kind of sex god? bella internal fumblings is fucking annoying as hell...weak ass bitch

bellas internal dialogue is SO FUCKING ANNOYING! You should really consider cutting it out of the story. Seriously.

oh man was hoping for more chapters it was just getting good too

That was absolutely brilliant. This author is fantastic, and great translation :) I am so glad I know french because I can read more stories. WOW. Love it and sincerely hope for more :)