Ok I'm sorry, but I'm done.
It don't have a very exciting plot to it and a to random.
Also, please, please, don't steal other book names to make a title name of a fanfic.
Frostfire belongs Amanda Hocking.
If you don't know what I am talking about, here's a little summary: Frostfire is the stunning first installment in a tale of love, betrayal and the need to belong. Here.
The Kanin Chronicles, is the series.
Don't ever do that again.

ok im stoping here sorry

I thnk that hes stupid for telling her to run. but I understand him as well. still to short

still to short

well now that was REALLY short

awwwwwwwwwwwwwww. they seem so cute together all curled up ( makes adorable little gooshie sounds) well I wouldn't know beings im not quite shure what they look like

it was a little short. well maybe more then a little but I can read a 500 paged book in a day. so its not really for me to judge on length. unless its like super duper short. ( trying not to be mean here just read a mean comment from someone saying that I was being mean. blah)

I agree I love cliff hangers to! I left one with my story I just wrote but I cant find out how to add more to it so im stuck.

wow. this is good. it could use a little more detail. but it flows ok. and it seems to be getting somewhere. I was going to stop and move onto another story because I was looking for stories about a certain anime (this could be one like that idk yet its only the first page) but im going to see this trough!

Very cute story, I like hearing Becca's POV. It would be intersting to see a story written in third person so we could find out what the Pevensies think about all this too. Thank you for your story, you have a very well developed writing style.

and you say your not romantic but your a total liar!

This story was very good! I enjoyed Becca's POV and thoughts. She is not Alex, but she is quite the character! It's safe to say that I love the Ride sisters (... I don't really know enough about Jason yet to say I like him as much as the girls). Their characters are well-developed and the plot never gets dull!

Favorite line of the chapter: "Ed, we don't have kids, we're not married, we're not of age, and we haven't even kissed yet!"

Can't wait to read more about the Rides!

Great job on this fic.

jason is so confusing

jason is cyco

nice line on peters part!