the fuck is that grammar

I can't read any of this!

You have a lot of things to work on one is being your grammar, second how you make the story, and third making cheesy lines is one of the things a lot of people don't go for.

Nice

This story is perfect.

Holy fuck, the grammar and spelling is horrific. It's hard to read because I have to try to understand the wording. I agree with whoever said it before me, that Tsunade wouldn't put him at S-class right off the bat. Naruto is a 13 year old gennin who JUST obtained his doujutsu, and can't control his bijuu. Putting him on the same missing-nin rank as Itachi Uchiha is a no-no. Another thing is how fast you decided to catapult into different areas. I'm kinda feeling that you blew Tayuya's personality out of proportion, she curses every 3 words, it's tiring to read. Another thing I noticed is that Naruto has Zabuza's old sword... Which I find odd becuase you said in the story that Naruto and Tayuya were going to head to Kiri. This is weird because Zabuza's grave is in Kiri, where his sword in sticking out of the ground, so it strikes me as odd because Naruto has the sword without visiting the grave or even being in the area. I would suggest you revise this story, add some meat to it, and get a beta reader.

Damn this is cool but really confusing.

it s a really good story i hope u make more ch

Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.

Awesome, have Naruto master all of the abilities that the Jubi Eye possesses, so that he can be very well prepared to face Vril, and good job with reviving Obito.

can't wait for more chapters hope you keep it up

Great chapter, I can't wait for the next one, so I wish u the best of luck with next chapter, the rest of this story, and all ur other stories, until next time, JA NE!

great story i can't wait for the next update.

Tsunade just ups and marks him as a missing nin? No way, I don't see that happening, not that easily.

Holy FU- I've only managed to read two paragraphs before the appaling grammar almost sent me into a coma. I understand that English is not your first language, correct? If so, I'd recommend an english speaking Beta to proofread and correct. Should that not be the case, you will fail at life as you will be incapable of doing the most basic of paperwork when (if) you get a job.