Great chapter.

Nice read.

i like this 1 better. good job

Is the RAF a reference to what happened in Sierra Leon back in the 80's or 90's?

Of course Lily would set off a panic, she seems to be the towns alarm.

I kinda noticed that the Lunar guards come and go, why don't they stay? And why would Luna want to use Celestia's guard, they could attempt a coup.

Speaking of Luna, is this still Nightmare moon or just regular Luna?

I like how you modified that episode, made it more interesting.

Awww poor Fluttershy.

I'm kinda surprised that Luna decided to let Twilight read the book and continue with her plot. Kinda interesting that she want's to visit Starswirl.

I laughed when the note said no presents but books for Spike

Poor Starswirl being shunned like that.

I'm kinda surprised that Twilight golem is betraying Luna.

I like the Lunar knights. If I had a choice between being ruled by Luna or Celestia, I'd pick Luna.

I think Applejack completely overreacted, her obsession with apples and her pride is getting the best of her.

I laughed when the Twilight golem found out she was going to do a lot of paper work.

Awww Nightmare Moon loves Twilight, how cute! Saying the new Starswirl is a bastard child, born from magic was certainly inventive. I wonder if that's painful at all... sounds painful.

So now the Twilight golem is alive, I wonder what is going to happen next.

Well Nightmare moon doesn't seem so bad.

Great chapter love the humor you put in it. So Applejack has a crush on Starswirl. Do any of other girl's have feeling's for her?

OMFG. It has been forever since you've updated the story. What's it been? Several weeks? XP. Anyway, I like the first half of the story. Minimal grammar erros. However, the 2nd half... You just kinda ramble on with quoting the episode and injecting your comments here and there... Still, it's a good story. There should be another confrontation with Nightmare Moon. Just a suggestion...

Nice story!

Great chapter how will Starswirl deal with her mother can't wait to see.

question will you be doing your own version of some episodes just wondering.

You di... You... He did the... Arrow in the... That's it! Forget it! *Slowly walks off*

OMG OMG OMG OMGOMG

Update this now I'm totally hooked.

A few spl errors, nothing bad.

WRITE MOAR!

There should be a twilight/starswirl showdown,

something that will ask the mane five now to choose between which, and to see if they can peer between the facade and see the true magic of friendship.