This is one of my all time writting style is very close to the way I think those raw questions out followed by the break of explanations and the stream of conciousness overall is fascinating to it up!
Love,
Tragic anime boy from Eva

I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS.
ITS PERFECTION IN WORDS.

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Lucky

You two...WHY ARE YOU SO FREAKING STUBBORN DAMMIT. YOU GUYS ARE IN LOVE AND YOU DON;T EVEN KNOWWWWWW
JUST CONFESS DAMMIT.

*sighs* Honestly, just...these two...

THIS IS BEAUTIFUL

I love this so much, Shizaya is one of the most beautiful couples ever. I love your writing, the way you describe their feelings and both POVs.
If I'm not asking too much, I'd like to ask you to let me translate both chapters to portuguese, giving all the credits to you, of course. There aren't a lot of Shizaya fanfictions in portuguese here and I'd love to translate this one. :3

ooooooh Q.Q i love it. it's like, the "real" shizuo and Izaya thinking so in the series XD I can see it befor me eyes. How they feel, but they can't say it.

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lol, I really really enjoyed this. This little Shizuo chapter/version of the 'Would you care?'.

Almost more than the Izaya chapter.

And omg, I really feel a tad bad for Shizuo TT.

How he almost feels rather 'less' compared to everyone else. How he's not a 'precious human' but rather a monster. A toy... And that despite that, he'd rather remain as such than be tossed away in boredom. And I really like how, despite said feelings Shizuo has, that he still views Izaya as still a real bastard of sorts... Because lets be honest, we all know he is~

Thank you for writing this! It was really fun to read . And it went just perfectly with the Izaya chapter. So yeah, thanx again! Much appreciation!

This fic is just so... profound... o.o I... I don't know what to say.

Reading Izaya's POV made me all teary and reading Shizuo's POV was like the final blow to me and I just ended up crying T-T

I don't see any grammar issues... Oh, but you typed "lose" as "loose" in chapter 2. (sorry, I take the spelling of words quite seriously)

Random and completely unrelated: I realised you wrote in present tense... ((finally someone who writes in the present tense!)) I don't even know why I put this in the review. Also... I have the weird feeling like I've seen you elsewhere before... on another site... You even have the same username o.o Maybe it's just a coincidence...

As i expected you did exellent with Shizuos POV, make a continuation_

oh!this one really was passionate and sad,at the end i felt tears rolled from my eyes!(TT)and i hadnt any tissue,damnit!Please make one from shizuos pov,too.

OMG, I just adored this~

Alot!

I kinda have a sick thing for onesidedness... I don't know why, there's just something about it that I just can't get enough of... Especially if it's a onesided!Izaya fic. Theres just something utterly sad about them I find...

Perhaps i'm a tad masochistic~

Anyways ".

Let me start off by saying I really liked how it was almost 'poetic' in a sense, with all the 'Would you cares'. It was heartbreaking to read. But in a good way. And I like how it worked its way up to the end rather climactically. Finishing it off with the "And would you care if I said that I love you ?" quote. And then ofcourse everthing that followed that~

I certainly enjoyed this little fic alot!

I especially enjoyed the ending part.

"No, you wouldn't, would you?"

That quote was really sad to see. More so because of all the "Would you care(s)" before it. You could have really ended it there. It would have been perfect like that... But I am super glad you didn't. Because everything after was just as awesome!

"They have a saying, you know; 'Heartfelt thoughts become lies when spoken'. That fits the situation rather well, if you think about it."

Given this fic, I'd have to agree 100%. That was such a wonderful way to put it. And it fits this just perfectly.

" Keep the shame I feel every time I think of you and me, think about confessing, and think about how it would feel to have you hold me, even for only a minute. "

And god... I feel like I was just kicked in the stomach there...

"I'll keep it all from you so that you won't feel sorry or pity when you can't return my feelings because, if there is anything I can't handle aside from your rejection is for you to feel sorry and pity me."

And even more so after reading that... TT.

"I'll try my best to stop it from happening; from keeping you caring, but, then again, you never seem to follow my plans, my expectations, do you?"

And OMG! I don't know if you mean't too, but I love how you leave that little opener at the end. The whole "-but, then again, you never seem to follow my plans, my expectations, do you?"" quote. Almost giving it a thought of that 'chance' for him... Utterly lovely TT!

Another thing I personally liked was how you left 'his' name out of this. Only using things like 'monster', 'protozoan' and things like 'the bond and pattern of hate' to describe 'said person'. I think it really adds on to the angst and depressing and dark mood and tone of the fic.

So yeah, thanks a bunch for writing this fic! It was majorly awesome~ And i'm super happy to have found it. I can't wait to see more from ya, or rather I hope you write more fics! You really really should! I eagerly await till' ya do~ (If you do TT)

So until, maybe, then!