it's good, but remember Americans don't say peaky (or generally even know what if means, lol). :)

You could make this into a multi-chap fic, that's how good this is:)

I wish this was longer.

how about a second chapter?

good, nice..but I wish it was longer with some smut :D there was a good oportunity for kissing...

Very nice, I really enjoy your writing.

Now *this* is good erotica. You turned a relatively simple scene into a smokin' hot moment. I also liked that Elena is older ...it gives you the freedom to completely disregard the whole threesome mess. I don't know if you ever plan on writing a sequel ...but...for the record - I'd be on that like white on rice!

Heh.

Lol, that's about the only reaction I have after reading this. Stuff like this would fit nicely in the next TVD one, the time travel one, but perhaps then not with vamping out but in other situations? And then a different rating, but sensual? Heh. Lol.

There's another story there, I think. See you there.

Spikey

Loved it! Hope this happens on the show!

ilovedit

Oh so delicious! This was amazing!

"Breathlessly he watches as a trickle of blood makes its way slowly down her neck to stop above the swell of her breasts. Instinctively he arches her back again, one hand fisting her hair and bends down to lick the trail of blood slowly off her skin."

- This was gorgeous perfection3 So hot.

love it!

Nice! When I saw TVD show. And the part where Elijah came. I was sensing a 'relationship' between them but they never showed it. Loved it. Maybe make more?

Ypu can't end it there! The story says complete but there is still so much more you can do qith this story! write more please!

I feel the need to thank you for writing this, lol. It's sexy but also really lovely, especially the last paragraph. You managed to create a beautiful snapshot of their relationship *and* you got Elena to straddle Elijah. Huzzah!