Where's the next chapter!? This was last updated in 2012, it's 2015 now! :(
Lazy! :( I want to know what happened to Kirby! :(

Lol it was so funny when Dark Galboros was going “Om nom nom” on Dedede's arm! Haha!

"What if I forget everything! First it's my name, next it will be how to walk or how to blink or how to touch my nose with my TONGUE!"
No... Not that! Anything but forgetting how to touch your nose with your tongue! *bawls for poor Marx's deranged fantasies*
Seriously thought, I can't tell you how wide that made my grin become. If I can imagine ANYONE worrying about such a thing, it's Marx. xD Can't wait to read more!

It's okay...

I really enjoyed reading this chapter and I love the way you protrayed Dedede. I also like the name Lyra. The battle it's self had much action and like how some Waddle Dee fought wihle others cowarded, but in the end united to protect their king. This is a nice story you have here. Nice job.

Immediately when I read "Drawcia!", I'm like "OH YES! :)" Anyway, it's nice to get back to Marx again (I only say it like that because I nearly forgot that he was the main character of the story...and it was only a couple of chapters ago that he was mentioned. I guess I've been more distracted than I thought lately XP)

Oh and I agree with you on the character tags. Who even did that? XD I remember when there wasn't even a character tag for the Kirby archive

It's okay; at least your fans can read what you have written down and I for one am perhaps one of them...

Ooooh, I think I know who the aunt is. Well actually I have two guesses as to who, but...I'm actually kinda hoping only one of them is right. I don't know...does that sound weird?

Pfft, I forgot what else I was going to say. Whoops...Awwwkward

Ha, finally! A fic that doesn't revolve around the anime or metaknight or fancharacters! And it's a good one too :D AAAND judging from the description it's going to have some of the characters I like. (Heh, sorry. I've just been taking a hella long break from Fanfiction, just popping in and out. This almost makes me want to go start writing something again XP)

So, I can't really give you any constructive criticism, 1) because there were just a few spelling or grammer errors here and there (and they were so minor, I can't even remember where they are), and 2) because I'm not good at giving any.

But I already like this story just from reading the first chapter (and scrolling through the second ;). And I'm faving this! :)

Drawcia. BTW, nice story. I hope you continue! Really!

Drawcia: Thats a bunch of malarkey!

Me: Hogwash!

Drawcia: Balderdash!

Me: Baloney!

Drawcia: Gobbledy-Gook!

Me: Jibber-jabber!

Drawcia: Hulabaloo!

Me: Unicorn Turds!

Drawcia-Muggle*******troll****!

Me: Le Gasp!

Marx: Will you both shut up! You could wake the dead you're so loud!

Me and Drawcia: Is that a self description?

Marx: ...

Drawcia: We won again! *hi fives mk15000*

Me: Drawcia and Me, five, Marx, Zero!

It's a cappy right?

Dude... I cannot believe it with my own eyes: that story here, now that shit was cash... for reals; your story matches up with canonicity and it's... it's GREAT!

Wow...that was so epic! I like how you gave the first Dark Matter the name Unno. I think it suits him very well. I might just start calling him that! It's great so far!

This was a good chapter. Dedede seems to be an interesting character, and I hope to see more of him.

Just asking, will Kirby be talking? I personally prefer it when he's able to talk, but if he's not going to, that's just fine. :)

I love the Dedede x Ripple Star Queen pairing, and I'm glad it appeared somewhere, even if only in a flashback.

And I see that Dark Matter is coming into the picture. (Although it probably was in Chapter I.) Dark Matter and Zero, along with Marx, Magolor and Drawcia are among my favourite villains of this series.

Well, this chapter was good. A bit long, but that's just me.

Keep-a-writing!

I'll quote Red as well:

'...'