Certainly some nice work going on here, an insightful look into Normans current mental state. If i had to pick it was a little unexciting, perhaps a better ending is needed to leave things on a cliff hanger?

I always believe ending a story (no matter how small) should pack a bit of a punch to keep it reeling in the readers mind. Yours kind of drifts off without really tying anything up or any kind of revelation. This is just my opinion anyway. Well done to you and keep up the good work!

Crims x