That was really cute and adorable!️️ I couldn't help but squeal a few times!

AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH I LOVE IT YOUR THE BEST I WISH THIS WOULD HAPPEN IN THE ANIMMMMMMMEEEEE I WOULD LOVE TO BE VORONA IN THE ANIME

Good work I liked the flash back, keep it up

Wowww thats really nice work for a first time. I got a tid bit hanged thouu, such cliffhanger. I want more hahaha :D

well that conflict with namie pushed vorona to kiss shizuo and it was so sweet 3

Moko and Kanae, I have absolutely no problem with you doing that as long as you link back to this fanfiction. Also thank you so much for enjoying the story.

I like this couple fanfic is the best story!Can I translate your story in Russian language?If your agree,I will mention you and your link of your fanfic.

It isn't thay OCC, you did a great job with every one. Keep up the good work.

OMG! I was searching for a good shizuona fanfiction for such a long time and this one is just...Just amazing! :D

The story is very detailed and awesome, but I do feel that you don't start a new line when you switch the dialogue from person to person. Can you help me find who's talking easier please?

Omg, loved it 3

a bit short but supa cute ;)

some spelling mistakes like in the beginning, where it out to be "exiting" the bakery instead of "existing".
overall, good but feels a bit OOC because it seems like everything came out of nowhere. need a bit more buildup and explanation, like how namie and vorona got antagonistic with each other before and currently.

So CUTE!SO!CUTE! (I don't mind either.(My boyfriend smokes.))

GREAT!FIC!

It's really good, but the characters are a little OOC. Oh, and a tip for other stories: in Japan, drinking age is 18 to 20 (or 16 to 20? Probably not.), it depends on the prefecture.