It was emotional and heart-wrenching. I really enjoyed it. If you hadn't told me you weren't a native English-speaker, I wouldn't have known.

Awwwww...!
I was kind of shocked at first. I never would have imagined my little McGeek would /ever/ feel that way... but you made it so realistic, I could have sworn that it was happening!
So sweet and touching :') The emotions were well-played and extremely believable.
Also, I congratulate you on your amazing English grammar skills. You're an amazing writer for having English as a second language, much better than a lot of writers on sites like this that have been doing this for years. I applaud you! Das ist wunderbar :) (or at least that's how I think it's said. I've only just started studying German.)

Well written, I really like it. But, I am a bit confused. They were out on a case when Tony confronted Tim, where are the others? It kind of seemed like you forgot they were there...
Mr. Max

Absolutely loved this.

Interesting concept.

One I haven't seen before for Tim and Tony.

Keep on writing.

Nicely done. My eyes went all foggy reading this. Oh and good idea complimenting the laptop, they are very sensitive.