Ryan's kind of arrogant, yeah?

Well, I think it's a very good chapter! Just.. I noticed that Kaitlyn seems kind of maybe like a mary sue. *shudders*. Mark was cool tho, kinda relatable. I liked the greek part, it was hilarious.

Look, I love the story. It had a great concept and all. Just.. Just 1 thing. Kaitlyn ruined the story for me. Please get rid of this gross Mary Sue. She didn't really have much of an impact or really contribute to the plot, methinks.

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I love the story

I just finished the whole story. ;w; it was absolutely fantastic for the most part with an excellent writing style for your first actual fic. But mmm I am a lil bjt upsetty with the whole katelin thingy. I can agree with some other reviews that she feels totally out of place and kinda mary sue around the end. ;w; I would have been more happy if they were just friends on earth. Also the actual battle with Medusa, the climax of the story seemed a little lacking. But you said the last few chapters you only had ten days to write, right? So I still loved it. ;w;

Still, I would love to draw some scenes from the earlier chapters. ;w;

Okay I know this story was written years ago but I freaking love it! I've never played a kid icarus game nor seen a playthrough of it before. I'm only briefly familiar with Pit, Dark Pit, Palutenia, and the nature tsundere goddess girl. I have recently been interested in the character Pit and I just adore all of this! I love this story despite knowing very little and I honestly haven't read a story as good as this for over a year!

I literally stayed up all night reading this~ Gosh you are making me want to try and draw a few scenes from this story, I adore it! This story actually just make me feel happy even when I put down my phone! Thank you so much~

Cute ending.

*cough*

Oh Pit you naive little child...

*siiighhh*

AW YES I WAS RIGHT! MODERN WORLD BRACE YOURSELVES!

This is uh set in the modern time right? I don't think High Schools were regulated in the medieval ages...

If it is set in the modern world then ooohhhh boy, let's see what's Pit's reaction to teens saying that Palutena doesn't exist and angels are just beliefs.

Got to the part with the tree, and VIRDI WHYYY. VIRIDI YOUR SUPPOSED TO HELP WHERE ARE YOU! AT LEAST SEND PHOSPHORA! (Sorry, I got emotional.)

Whoa. This puts a whole new meaning onto chapter 22(possibly 21) in game. Geez.